by Brandie69
Can't wait till the next one. Find myself looking forward to these everyday.
I'm tickled :)
Thanks for reading. I have another one almost ready. Soon!
B
You found a way to hold off a little longer, unbelievably good stuff. I love how you just keep building the tension. I look forward to the next chapter.
my brain feels hot and dizzy from the lack of blood I hope the brother gets his sis soon for my body is running out of patience and the excitment is killing me
One more chapter, just submitted. It'll only be a few more days 'till you find out if he gets her in the end. Or the other end ;)
B
I had my penis in hand all time while reading.
Made a mess need to be cleaned up.
Can not wait till sis helps her brother.
It keeps getting better.... After you are done with this story, I hope you'll tell us what you were doing while you were writing it?? :)
I've just submitted a story that talks about the things I do when I'm writing :)
It's called "My Editor and Me." It hasn't been approved yet, but I hope you'll read it.
B
Very HOT Chapter 5!
And of course, now I HAVE to go find out if Jordan gets her in both ends!
Heck, and Emily has to be in the mix as well.
She engaged in some pretty dirrty activity herself.
Off to read.
You're doing a masterful job with this, maintaining the quality of the writing and building the narrative so nicely. And, I must point out, the prose is flawless. Do you self edit? Use a proofreader? I love the growing intimacy, not only between sister and brother but also between sister and friend. Nicely done. I continue to be impressed. You're evoking genuine emotion with your writing, which is not an easy thing to do.
I'm having fun re-reading these chapters again today. It's been a while.
I self-edit. Writing (non-erotic, mind you) is my day job and has been for more years than I care to admit.
B
I am up to chapter five and had to tell you this writing is, "so good!". I get a sense of realism and intimacy from each of them, so you clearly have the life experience and patience to bring life into the words. It is an excellent choices of terms for the title and I also enjoyed the pace at which you evolved the storyline. Thank you!
I hope you enjoy the ones still ahead :)
B
ps: I submitted a new story and I'm anxiously awaiting its appearance.