All Comments on 'Down But Still Up For Fun Ch. 01'

I enjoyed this story, my only complaint is that it really is unbelievable. But then, this is a site for erotic fiction so credibility is not always needed.

Very unbelieveable, but still a good story. Looking forward to the next chapter. Makes me wish it had been my legs that got broken !

Good story,cant wait for part 2.

Hi Bob,

I agree with the previous comments about the unbelievability, but that is no big deal to me. Personally, I like the theme of older women using a younger man as a sex toy, especially orally pleasuring the women. I am enjoying the story and I hope you continue it.

Cheers,

Tsememgb

Love the setup. I can't wait to hear more about the older sister. It wouldn't hurt to give a hint of the younger sister's age.

actually thought it very believable. there are thousands of orphaned children out there in there in this world. i remember as a young man walking around loking for work. 60's era. thanx.

is fiction is fiction is fiction. Realism is a nice touch but not obligatory when one is looking for a hot story. I liked it!

who the hell cares. I like it and hope you decide to continue. Can't wait to see what big sis has in store for him.

Like the other critics said: unbelievable. Getting hit by a nurse that can take you home is one item, but her having a horny, giant-boobed sister makes it more far-fetched. Then again, its so much fun you WANT to believe it! (also said) This just screams for a sequel. Also, your lack of shit language to describe the sex was appreciated.

...Mercy, mercy!

Crouches? You mean crutches. So many mistakes I stopped reading.

Get an editor.