All Comments on 'Dragon (S)Layers Ch. 43'

Overall, it's a sound work, the later part needing an overall re-write for plot cogency and a more apparent story line.

Mechanically, you have very few issues; any mildly competent editor/proofer should catch them.

You certainly have the basis for something fine, it just needs some work. You would probably benefit from finding someone to work with you.

Regards,

GeoD

Hey, thanks for the feedback!

I've actually begun working on smoothing out the first volume and I plan to refine the others to a gleam as well in the fullness of time. Going forward, there /is/ a plan in place to bring things to a head but for the most part I consider the material I've released to be first draft material.

That said, I think my biggest problem has always been lack of planning but the rest of the craft stuff is improving gradually, I think. Reading comments like this is really helpful and interesting. Thanks so much for taking the time and I hope you enjoy the future chapters. :)