All Comments on 'Dreams'

You might consider getting an editor to lend a little help, but this looks promising.

So good

Forget the editor - this stuff is great ad it is!

I love the plot, and surprisingly I hope Jason get's off his arse so they can work things out!

Merry Christmas :D

now make us care about Jason. He seems to be a loser and she's better off without him; now show us why Natalia should love him, or even want him back.

Great start and I'm of the mind that you need to make me care about Jason cause right now if a hole opened up and swallowed him, I wouldn't care, but this is your story and while you do need an editor, you got a great start. Look forward to the rest!

seriously please update soon! i want to see what will happen with them...jason is an assh****!!!! he needs to redeem himself big time!!! hurry hurry update please

Okay....

So far Jason sounds like a real douche bag. I hope she can have the strength to not settle for promises that he won't keep. Notice he said she'd caught him with 2 women meaning there had been others. I'd have liked to know more about the background of the couple and of them seperately. I almost have to wonder if he's abusive the way he grabs her wrist.