All Comments on 'Droid's Awareness'

You write like a child. This is an adult site.

never mind the other comment, I liked it , would like to see where you are going with this, please write another chapter, interesting premise , I hope you finish it, ,,, jim=== chicago

36C may be a common breast size in America, but I've spent time in Japan thanks to the US Navy, and most Japanese women that I encountered have smaller breasts.

I see that you are new talent. I hope you will view my criticism as constructive.

You writing skills seem technically fine including you description of event; however your character don't feel engaging. Your AI robot just want to survived(basic goal), and the rest of your human characters didn't really have much personality.

I think you should try to flesh out your characters motivations and relation to each other.

Here is a quote

The battle between good and evil is a legitimate theme for a Fantasy (or for any work of fiction, for that matter), but in real life that battle is fought chiefly in the individual human heart.