by overzealous20
PERFECT SEDUCTION ARTICLE. IF ONLY IT WERE LONGER. I LOVE THE WAY YOU BUILD SUSPENSE AND EXCITEMENT. SO MANY BORING ARTICLES ARE JUST UNEXCITING....YOU MAKE ONE WANT TO TURN THE PAGE, TO FEEL AS ONE READER DID YOUR OWN EXCITEMENT. I WAS FORWARDED THIS BY A POTENTIAL SEDUCER AND THINK I WILLYIELD.
too many grammar and spelling mistakes. Perhaps you'd consider consulting an editor? Seriously. You have ability and just need more polish. Best, Ken
A well written acount of a beautiful encounter. I look forward to more from this author.