by JimBob44
Good story with a nice little ending. 4 Stars for sure. Maybe be fitting to have another story about the idiot neighbors. Maybe they mess with the wrong couple of young ladies and have to deal with their Daddy or a couple of their brothers. Just an idea.
I dated a little Cajun gal talk just like that, yeah. Elise's hobby was making knives. I hope the years have treated her kindly.
What a terrific story! Really well done. Now I'll have to read more of your work.
Them anonymous don’t like your words, no! This Louisiana boy feel at home yeah. DeGarde down da Bayou hear? C’est bon, JimBob44, c’est bon!
Ghetto speech?
It’s Cajun!
WTF I’m from Canada and I know that. These characters are genuine and that’s how they speak down there.
Great ending
5
Chimo1961
This does not need a grammar check or a spell check in any way. The so called "ghetto" speech is part of the story's charm in my opinion. Most of your stories follow the same speech patterns, I think. This adds a certain realism to your characters and I like how I can almost imagine your characters having real life conversations in their native dialects/accents. This feels more natural to me instead of say, reading like a third person account of the content of conversations between the characters or even first person grammatically correct dialogues.
I have read most of your stories. Some are really top drawer. I cannot say this is one of your best, but it is a good story worth reading. Don't understand anonymous 07/16/20 comments. Maybe another one of those looking for a reason to trash a story. Could be jealously. I think this one is more than a 4, so I give it a 5*. Good effort.
This needs a grammer check _&_ a spell check....in the worst way. The character's speech was sooooo 'getto' that it was distracting....to the point that I didn't finish it.
Would like to know what the boy's next door thought about Whitney and Harold?
I'm reading all your's stories. Like they very much. You are a very good writer. Congratulations.
Enjoy the patois. Going read me some more this here author stories, yeah.
How come an old guy like me, can't find a Whintey with 35E tits! Harold is now my hero.
Contrary to the statement before the story, I found this well written, and taken to New Orleans with the grammar. I enjoyed the plot as much as the sexual intent, and look forward to more readings from JimBob!
Truthfully, I don't usually go for JimBob for jerkoff material, just good story...
But hell - this one will do! It'll do just fine.
Good job, Jimbo.
Hmmm, good story, but shaving off a nice thick bush should be a crime against nature. Ya hear, yeah!
Interesting the details of the photoshoot and their aproximation.
Gotta hand it to ya, y'all done right by that story...and I be lookin' for more in your next writin'...great job and don't be pullin' our legs with makin' us wait for mo...
This should have been put in LW for more attention. Very well written. Even though it is an old man's fantasy, you made it feel plausible. Thanks for your work and giving us something great to read.
reasonable man
You nailed it with this one. I really enjoyed it! Keep up the good work. Thanks.
Great dialogue, and I love the SWLA patois. I just can’t wipe the smile off my face when I read your stuff. Always manages to knock away some of the crud of a crappy day. Thanks. *****
you will here that accent a lot. met a Cajun Husband and Wife excellent People.
Thanks, Jimbob. Enjoyed how the story was about Harold and Whitney, and how the ex-wife was a bit player.
I really enjoyed the story. Where does the accent the characters use in this story come from?