All Comments on 'During the Football Game Ch. 04'

I have very much enjoyed this series. Your content is great.

One small thing for you to consider. Be aware of mixing tenses. The story should happen either in the past or the present, with exceptions of course. Drifting back and forth, particularly mid-paragraph, is awkward for the reader.

Overall, nicely done!

It is a great series and I look forward to the threesome and maybe the mother and daughter can both get pregnant together.