by LaRascasse
Great story. So much happened in such few words. Takes a lot of talent to do that.
Short but incredibly powerful. More than just the throwaway stroke story you typically see on here. You really convinced me of the love these two had for each other. Very well done.
Very well told.... like sharing the perspective of a lost soul. A first rate piece.
that brought tears to my eyes , and being a love between a brother and a sister made it more special . when you truly love someone heart and soul to no end , you will never forget it EVER . there will be nobody that will ever fill that part of your life like that . and society still thinks its wrong , I DONT
So sad. I love the nostalgic quality of your work. I feel like I need to take you out for a drink after that.
I loved this. It has a breathless, train wreck quality to it that never lets up until the very end... and then it ends as train wrecks and breathlessness often does. Loved the refrain too - I love you, Vicky Jones. It provided a kind of cadence to the piece that acted as an anchor in this story that otherwise was hurtling towards a tragic end. I just couldn't stop reading.
I read a lot of stories on this site . This is one of the few 5's I have given but (as I wipe away the tears ) it is the most deserving . Thank you for your gift . BRAVO ! BRAVO !
on daring to publish this here where so much seems the same. Now I have to figure out why vicky is such a popular tag.
I'm not normally one for this category on Lit but I do always love a tormented soul. I really enjoyed the raw emotion and the dramatic shift in the end. The sad story element is under valued in erotica and really needed in my opinion.
Outside of an abiding fondness for the song " I Want You Back ", people like me don't get MJ & people like me don't get this story. It's just too over the top. I can't deny that this author knows his demographic & has appealed to that not insignificant subset in no uncertain terms.
My ommniscent, inner cynic whispers in my ear that if the narrator had loved Vicky Jones "right", she wouldn't have played tag with rapidly moving vehicles . Regardless of that venal sentiment, this author has confessed himself to be empathetic with main characters who are vulnerable & weak in key areas.
That admission takes a definite strength that I reluctantly admire to a limited but definite point.
... I have ever voted. Unusual for Literotica, this story is so beautiful - and heartbreakingly poignant.
Thank you.
Simply heartbreaking. Every paragraph here is heartbreaking.
Everything all the previous remarkers, even the Anons, had said.
Your wonderful story aroused all sorts of emotions but one decision was just so easy.
5*, should have been 10.
Absolutely Amazing.. and as soon as I stop crying so that I can see to type, I might praise this again... Brilliant story.
I seriously think this story has some very real experiences tied to it, if this is so, then please accept my sincere condolences.
NOW----- write a happy sexy story, let your creative juices flow. you will feel better.
sit down and make us miserable why don't you!? Well written story but highly depressing!
I appreciate the fact that you have not followed a formula, such as 'stuck in a cabin in a blizzard' or 'sister helps brother after his accident,' etc. Fantasies can culminate however we chose but real life often ends with unpleasant outcomes, especially if one is involved in incest. Sad stories about incest remind us that there is a difference between fantasies and reality and we should always be mindful of that difference.
I couldn't stop crying as I read this which is saying something for me. I can't stand crying. It awakens too much pent up pain. Beautiful story! I love the echoed words. Love and pain. The two are inseparable in my mind. Thank you for this lovely story!