by seth_perm
This was a great story. Packed with a PLOT and the right amount of sex. I honestly Enjoyed the story. I almost said movie. I could picture the whole thing. Keep up the great work.
Fantastically written story, not only ultra hot and sexy, but also a great plot (like almost all your stories). You've greated a great sci-fi universe that's been surprisingly well developed for this type of tale.
Can't wait to read your next story already!
A good story, to bring a smile to a mans face.
I liked how the surprisingly lucky events were almost comical and the "fight" scene was quite funny to read as well.
If someone wants a serious story, this isn't it. The story is much better this way, if you make sequels I suggest you add slightly more conflict and detail (it was a bit rushed at times).
Oh and it reminds me do you (the author) like Clive Custler? The story has that feel to it.
The Eden stories were great. As others have said, I enjoy a plot with sex. And I -love- the Rocker/Mod reference.
It would be great to see another chapter where the hero gets all three girls back.
The points that immediately come to mind are, the hero learns of a treasure on a planet somewhere and he needs all three to get it. And he could adopt a Mod identity (via android or something) to get Carrie out of her marriage.
short on words i can be but worth the read thanks to posting.
5 stars just dont do your story Justis.
Just wanted to offset the previous anonymous moron. This was a good read, 5 stars!
You wrote a story about a little guy being screwed by a politician and he actually enjoyed it!