All Comments on 'Emma's Naked Mall Run'

by Monolith2001

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kiwiloverkiwiloveralmost 9 years ago
Missing too much

Ok, this does what it says on the tin, but why? If you are going to use a narrative style, then you need to get into the mind of the exhibitionist, or if you are there, get out long enough to share it!

Why did she want to go naked through the mall? What did she feel whilst she was preparing? why pick the shops she did? Why bother with the masturbation at all? How did others react? Clothing gone - who took it?

What could have been a good story has failed here simply through insufficient extension. Still, a good start. 2* but not far off 3.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
I wish I loved in that town

I love pressing my breasts against my windows so drivers can see them. It turns me on so much. If I lived here I would masturbate in public ALL the time!

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