by Ickenboffer
Character development superb-story line addicting-a movie? YES!
One of the best and I think with a smattering of cleanup could be one of the best on the site. Keep up the great work.
Great storyline and well written. Keep up the much appreciated writting style..The only thing I would suggest
is to have a proof reader..
This is one of the best novels I have read in a long long time so keep it up because this is a true masterpice :D
one of the best stories I have ever read......wonderful!
I liked it. all of it. the best part was the coversation at end. you tied everyday life into a great sexual story. deffinly a page turner.
This magnificent story starts off as wall-to-wall red hot sex. The hero is lucky enough to keep rescuing damsels who are eager to nibble on his late-50's body. He is a patient, gentle, vigorous lover, which makes one, then two, then three, and finally his wife-to-be superpassionate, often taking him two or three at a time. Any 18-year-old would kill to be in his shoes. At his age such stamina has got to be a fantasy. The degree and variety of his loving generosity (and his fabulous wealth) becomes clear only in the climax to the saga. The pace of the long story is marvelous. And the writing is excellent, but with some misprints and grammatical problems: You must not use "I" as the object of a preposition, damn it! Using an editor would be a good idea. Still, this is a 5-star tale, fun but also deeply touching in its handling of true love.
I really enjoyed your story. I think you should continue to write I look forward to reading other wonderful stories from you.
Interesting story...good characters....really good read...
I usually hate stories where an older man "saves" a young woman, but this was very well done. I loved it :)
Fred might have turned out to have a tender soul but what a pig, rules, rules and more rules.
Excellent! I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story and hope to find more that you have written.