All Comments on 'Enlightened Descent Ch. 02'

Quite a twist since the first chapter, in Penny especially.

I like the overall premise. Allison's being submissive to the point of slavery and of course there's the uncertainty of how far Penny will push her, how malicious she's really going to be, and for who's benefit she's doing it.

The sex scenes were good too, both the first one and the one at the end. Passionate and cathartic, as it should be.

I'm not sure how I feel about the tattoo and haircut, despite Allison's arousal. I understand the need for conflict, but I can't bring myself to enjoy anyone's torment. I suppose I also prefer stories where the couple faces external drama, rather than them hurting each other on purpose. Which brings me to the point that the emotional aspect of their relationship feels anemic so far. Which is fair, as that might take a while to develop.

Thank you Jessica. Whomever Anonymous is, sorry you didn't appreciate the story. Everyone is entitled to an opinion, but Insults are never helpful.

I find that the use of coercion is interesting, but I would be careful how this proceeds. I like the fact the Penny gives Allison every opportunity to reject her proposition, but that she ends up falling for it anyways, despite obvious risk. In contrast to the other comment, I find your writing very inventive. Keep up the good work, and don't let the comments of one person influence your path.

Well written.

Cant wait to start ch. 3 to see where this is going! Hope I can hold on that long!

Very nice.

One misconception though. The world is full of men, willing and wanting to fuck, lesbian women. Possibly to convert?

Unfortunately you left this scenario a bit behind the curtains. I'm a bit in love with curls perms or bubble perms, so you have given her a perfect one. But it was a short affair. Pitty.

All in all its nice story and smoth written.

Thank you for sharing your masturbation fantasies

This just got hotter. It is rolling out well and makes me want to read on.

I'm starting to notice a patron in Saphhia stories... But it's not a problem; each story is awesome in itself.