All Comments on 'Erik's Inheritance Ch. 03'

Good work. Story is coming along nicely.

More !!

Like to see where this is going. More please!

I understand "the overwhelmed hero who grows into his role" story type, but the character seems to be acting almost dumb. He has a briefcase and now a suitcase of documents that he still hasn't gone through. Even it it is stuff he isn't trained to read (accounting documents, contract legal language, etc) there should be enough there to tell him who the accountant is, at least. Hell, the Estate Attorney should have known that. Please have him wise up and stop acting like an idiot.

I'm glad that you said that Feonorx. If I was in his place I would get a lawyer and have them go through all the paperwork to get things straightened out. It's what any person with a brain would do. So yes Erik is being a total moron. Also from what I have read this all seems pretty moronic the way things are happening. I'm sorry but I give it two and a half stars at best.

Just needs tweaking. Proof reading and correcting silly errors would go a long way to improving the flow. Using the wrong words slows the reader down reducing the enjoyment.

Still good...