All Comments on 'Escape from Earth Ch. 04'

It's getting more interesting.

... because this is NOT how human anatomy works, as far as I know:

"Jism filled the veins in his shaft and he could feel the pressure building until he was unable to restrain it."

...and another time in this chapter you mention the semen in the veins of his penis. ????

Okay, I understand. He's a whore and fucked almost a half of United States in his first 50 years of life, right? I mean, it's almost impossible to have so much girlfriends or random sexual contacts, unless you deliberately trying to achieve some score or smth. So far, the image of your main character is becoming worse and worse. Stop whoring him.

You are correct, I was writing for visual effect but "duct" would be more accurate than "veins." Thank you for the comment.

As for Adam being a whore, I saw him as having roughly 10-15 sexual partners in his life and did not consider him all that promiscuous. I will consider your comment on how to write him less "slutty" so thank you for the feedback.

I sincerely hope that you will continue this story. In my humble opinion, this story is publishable. Very well thought out.

"As for Adam being a whore, I saw him as having roughly 10-15 sexual partners in his life and did not consider him all that promiscuous."

That sounds entirely reasonable. Personally, I didn't perceive him as all that promiscuous. Given the description of a few one night stands, a few short-term flings, and a half dozen of so actual girlfriends, 10-15 sexual partners for a guy a few years out of college sounds completely reasonable.

Anyway, I'm really enjoying the story so far, especially the slow reveal on Adam's hidden power(s).