All Comments on 'Etched Memories of New Friends'

"You open the door and welcome me into your home."

No I do not. Writing a story in the second person (you you you) takes real skill and even then seldom works. You don't have that skill and you are only alienating half your readers.

"Then Ella tells me how tonight it's about her more so." makes no sense at all.

"We are all laying there"

No. You are lying there.