All Comments on 'Every Man's Fantasy Ch. 15'

For the life of me though, I couldn't figure out what it is. It was filled with an odd mix of antifeminist ranting, the breaking of the fourth wall, and a lot of pointless descriptions of travel. I really liked the previous chapters but this one really seemed like a pointless filler.

Another great chapter. I like how your taking your time and not rushing through the story. What if Yumi had twin boys lol just an ideal

Love your story! Can't wait to read more about Ezra!

But I think I understand why you wanted to invest so much into the tech details and various side stories. The feminazi routine seemed... extensive -I agree with much of the rhetoric, yet am unsure of the relevance to the story. But it's your bully pulpit to use as you will.

Some industrial espionage might underpine the Yumi storyline -or not. Maybe it's just a matter of the big Corp not wanting their merger threatened by her pregnancy?

The extensive separation of the newlyweds seems like a terrible strain, yet I'll wager Danielle pours herself into her work in response to her loneliness -thus driving the Samothea project forward with her force of will.

I'm truly enjoying your tale, and I could tell that you had a lot of fun with this chapter as well, which came through wonderfully as a sense of lightheartedness (putting aside the imbeded social treatise lol).

What seemingly started as a well detailed yet lighthearted sex fantasy is quickly revealing the depth of a far reaching drama.

Thanks once more for sharing your time and talent,

Jason

I find the chapters about Danielle to be a real trial to get through since I see the overall story as being about Ezra and I begrudge the chapters that don't involve him and Samothea. I find myself skimming through them. If the author finds them necessary, they could still be much, much shorter. The author has the right to include whatever characters he wishes, of course, but as a reader of the story I also have the right to skim over them as distractions from the main story.

That said, I find the story of Samothea to be very well written. With the erotic elements less detailed it could well be published professionally.

It laid ground work for development of the engine necessary for Danielle's rescue of Ezra, though he may not WANT to be rescued in the traditional sense.

It also created a plot device for Hestia to become involved in the story, again. If you recall, she said if she could ever find a place like that, she would move there immediately. 'A place like that' IS Samothea, so I expect her to pop back up.

The look into Danielle's foray into feminism fits very well with Ezra's observations of how things are, or have become on Samothea with no men involved.

Plus, there is some intrigue going on related to Yumi's background, and it's related to one of the big industrial manufacturers in Japan, the same one who made the rocket engine Danielle saw in Kyoto.

Then, there was the smut mixed in for the pervs... ;)~

If the author had skipped, or cut back on ths chapter, you all would have been complaining about her not giving any background about events, in later chapters.

Can't have it both ways.

GeoD

GeoD,

Thanks. You understand me extremely well. I've replied to your very kind earlier comment in a comment on chapter 19.

Regards,

Erinaceous.

So much to marvel at :)

I really enjoyed your foray into the "awakened feminist".

Being a fairly old-fashioned male, it's rather disheartening to try to treat a woman with respect just because that's who I am. Worse is when I get scowled at when I hold a door for a woman. The fact that I hold doors open for Everyone - male, female, young or old - is irrelevant to the feminazis who seem bound and determined to be offended no matter what a man does.

That said, I could not care less about them any more than I do racists or any other "ists"... it's not my problem that they are limiting their lives and focusing on negatives. I figure it's a pretty short life, might as well enjoy it - and I'm thankful that I have a similar outlook to Ezra's: I am happiest when those around me are content and cared for. Obviously that's why I identify with your protagonist so well, and yet your story is so much richer than yet another "Nice Guyz gets Lotz Sex Yo" :D

Almost caught up and ready to set off into unexplored territory, but sadly also time to get some rest. I'm looking forward to the new adventures in a very few chapters but wanted to stop and say "Thanks for sharing your time and talent" before I head for the land of Nod.

Jason

An elderly man I knew over two decades ago (long deceased) whose orientation was that of an earlier generation, when a woman got onto him for holding the door open for her, replied "Well..... I thought you was a lady"!

Made even more amusing by the fact that he was a gentle, congenial, mild-mannered gentleman.

Paul in Oklahoma