All Comments on 'Every Man's Fantasy Ch. 21'

This is a very unsatisfactory conclusion to this chapter. 5 stars of course, but to leave it hanging like that, you are an evil author. The hook was set long ago (for me at least) to end on such a note is simply sadistic. :p

LOL. It's nice to be appreciated.

I did telegraph that twist. I hope I won't keep you dangling too long.

Was looking forward to Gloria and Ezra having a go at each other! :p

It seems that changes to the law expanding from 75 years to 100 years would not apply retroactively but only to future projects.

... much less a lawyer in Erinaceous' universe, but it seems to me the company's claim for extension is too late. Unless they filed their claim when Ezra left, the colony became independent four years ago. It doesn't seem like they should be able to retroactively revoke that independence.

(I'm willing to believe that the extension from 75 to 100 years was probably deliberately made retroactive)

How is a story of the 16 years old Yael meeting people, dogs, shopping and having tea parties is "every man's fantasy"?

I suggest the Nakatani Corporation could decide to assist the cause of the Samotheans,

To solve the fertility problem, research would produce an enzyme supplement.

Good story line enjoyed it. The long pages of sex got to be a little much. If you deleted or shortened the sex scenes it would be better all around. A little sex is good, repeated and repeated and repeted sex gets old and most readers skim over it to stay with the story line. Thanks and good job

They're going to find the missing enzyme in the valley of the rabbits, so they are not failing and remain in control of the planet's wealth.

you are killing us. Erinaceous. please atleast give us a idea how long untill the next chapter we are on tenter hooks? here. fabulous.

Sorry, everyone, to be so slow. The final chapter has turned into three chapters.

I've also taken on a new time-hungry job in my local community, besides finding the writing itself a little bit difficult at the moment.

Thanks everyone for sticking with my story - and to Jason R. Taylor for reading it a second time.

Sorry to anyone who has tried to contact me via email on the Author bio page, It's an old email address and I rarely t access it; so apologies if I've missed anything. I'm not deliberately ignoring you.

I've binge read this and am suitably impressed. I've held off commenting until now but am blown away by this imaginative, encompassing tale. Thank you for your efforts! Speaking from experience, it's not easy to find the time to build these imaginary universes and people from scratch, and all for free.... Thank you again and can't wait for the finale.

D.

That was definitely a bombshell :/

I saw the run-up of chapters ending in December and (wrongly) assumed that 21 was the finale - especially given the four month gap... so you can imagine my disappointment that I didn't arrive at the conclusion after this hours long reading marathon.

Then again, I can only assume you've got quite a bit more cooked up - at the very least the wealth of Mr. Fanshaw will play a key role.

Regardless, this has been a very enjoyable way to spend my reading time and I will just have to put this back into the "someday" folder that I pulled it out after the last time I was caught up... so until then, thanks for the great story.

Jason

It's been a minute....