All Comments on 'Everybody Needs a Hobby Ch. 11'

by GeorgeDaBuilder

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mavir9mavir9about 12 years ago
This Gets Better and Better

I want a copy of the calanders, both sets.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Finish

Don't leave us hanging. Finish this wild and sexy tale of adventure.

I'll be checking on a regular basis to see how this story plays out.

crow76308crow76308about 12 years ago
Good Chapter

Engaging writing, but you keep shifting, sometimes in mid-sentence, your voice from first to third person, which can be a little jarring. Other than that, great work.

GeorgeDaBuilderGeorgeDaBuilderabout 12 years agoAuthor
Ya caught me

Thanks for the comments Crow - I noticed on this chapter that I was doing that and went back thru and thought I caught them all. I'm new at this writing thing and trying to just tell a story. I'm making a concerted effort to keep the next one straight.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Great story

Please continue 12 or 13 required to end the series

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Visual inspiration

I saw these pictures and instantly was transported to the story of one of your calendar shoots:

http://fuskator.com/full/muY0qVZZwwN/car_Diana_Diana%20Gold_FFM_gals4free_gals4freegrp_group_nipple%20sucking_stockings_threesome.html

I thought you might want to use them as inspiration for a future story.

Rapier875Rapier875almost 8 years ago
This is so good !

After the first 2 or 3 chapters, I wasn't sure I wanted to continue reading - as they were a bit 'samey' - but boy am I glad I did !

This is one hot story !

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