by GeorgeDaBuilder
Don't leave us hanging. Finish this wild and sexy tale of adventure.
I'll be checking on a regular basis to see how this story plays out.
Engaging writing, but you keep shifting, sometimes in mid-sentence, your voice from first to third person, which can be a little jarring. Other than that, great work.
Thanks for the comments Crow - I noticed on this chapter that I was doing that and went back thru and thought I caught them all. I'm new at this writing thing and trying to just tell a story. I'm making a concerted effort to keep the next one straight.
I saw these pictures and instantly was transported to the story of one of your calendar shoots:
http://fuskator.com/full/muY0qVZZwwN/car_Diana_Diana%20Gold_FFM_gals4free_gals4freegrp_group_nipple%20sucking_stockings_threesome.html
I thought you might want to use them as inspiration for a future story.
After the first 2 or 3 chapters, I wasn't sure I wanted to continue reading - as they were a bit 'samey' - but boy am I glad I did !
This is one hot story !