All Comments on 'Everything for the Career Ch. 01'

Decent enough start to the story but I'm confused by Jennifer's age. If she's 32 and has worked for the bank for 18 years, that means she started at age 14. Either she was very precocious or international banking houses have some very peculiar requirements for their job postings.

The use of cabin, when office appears to be intended, is very distracting. And the age thing. As was previously pointed out she likely did not start work at 14 and she likely has been married too long for her age. Making her 38 would clear up a lot.

Trogted

if she is 32 now and she has worked for this bank for 18 years she started when she was 14? I mean maybe the author meant 42... but that sort of over sight tells me this story is going to be silly or waste of time

decent start... but the fact is this marriage cannot be saved. This is a very self centered woman who has no buisness being married whether she is 32 which of course is fucking impossible or 42 -- which makes the idea of having 4 kids also impossible.

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<b> Imagine her as a mother </b>...Oh my God I forget to feed the baby... Gee I hope its not FEAD!!!

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After 15 years of an awful marriage where she turns him down all the time for sex ... where eveything is about her... what can she say for 15 years of HIS wasted life... Opps... sorry?

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Even the sex she is thinking about is done out of GUILT... she doesnt want sex b/c she loves him... she wants sex b/c she is on a power high.

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Thats why the 8pm phone is a killer. She was on the phone for 30 minutes with her "Asian team" but never once thought of her stupid dumb old knuckle dragging husband until she was asked...

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Another BIG flaw is when wife's dad asks late at night <b>DOES ARTHUR KNOW? I mean WHY would the wife's dad think that the husband does not KNOW at 8pm at night? </b>

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wouldnt the assumption be that she has told her own husband? The Wife's father should of saId... <i>Boy I bet Arthur is happy</i> or <i>What was arthur's reaction? </i>

...promotes an employee, no matter the position, based on promiscuity. Seriously.

That is after all where this story is heading, as we all know.

on such a shallow and incredibly self centered woman? An occassional piece of tail isnt the reason, you get that from dates. You cant love a woman like this, no matter her statements to the contrary she is only capable of loving herself. Such a waste of two lives. 18 Years eh, say she was what, 21 beginning at the company, so she is say 39 and now ready to start a family and wants four kids. One first would have to assume she is going to take an extended leave of absence to have the children after just getting her new job. There is no way with the job demands, the need for international travel, and the many long hours she can go thru four pregnancies much less raise four children. there there comes the age issue and problem pregnancies and possible genetic defects of the children based on her age at conception. The odds would get worse with each child, not better. The husband is pathetic, he could have saved the marriage years ago, by telling her he wanted a divorce. If she had truly loved him, she would have changed her lifestyle enough to give her husband some love. One critiquer mentioned no company promotes women based or promiscuity, how wrong can one person be. In many governmental and business systems women work themselves up the chain with good work and good sex. Granted in the US it is dangerous now for organizations and businesses to do this sort of thing as women can use the new laws to sue. But it is still done. Affairs at work are usually condemned by policy and avoided by observation. One reason being that in breakups the workings of the company are totally disrupted by such things. Actual quiet affairs are never a source of conflict and seldom observed by outsiders. Many executive assistants are employed based on job knowledge, age, looks, and willingness to spend many hours with their supervisor. Male execs with females assistants, female execs with male assistants. How does the saying go, oh yes, open thy eyes and thou shall see.

Beware of career oriented women, those who have ambitions, those who have sweated blood and tears for their jobs. They are evil--only a man can do that for his job...

The previous two comments seem to be from someone who is trying to explain the story from the author's standpoint because it was such a bad start. If it was supposed to leave me in suspense, it didn't. There was nothing vaguely erotic and the descriptions were so mundane in detail, I've no incentive to check out the rest of this story. And, having blundered so badly that the only details people point out are the bad math and using 'cabin' for 'office', it appears that the writer is using the comments section to plead for people to keep reading. In the introduction, the author already asked people to forgive this part and wait for any sex until the third installment. Which he probably finds necessary because there is nothing in the least compelling in this chapter. However, he then explains everything that would be better explained in the body of the story, asking the reader to prejudge and condemn the female character. And besides, this is so short, why write it in pieces? For my tastes, this sounds more like a diatribe from someone who's either been burned, or doesn't like women in the work force. Very, very boring

If she is 32, and worked at the bank 18 years. She started working at the bank at 14. I don't think so.

I didnt even notice while I was reading its not important enough to go back and verify. Its not the end of of the world. <p><p>

There is also nothing about the wife screwing her way to the top. <p><p>

I thought it was a good start and things can go either way from here. The wife could put more emphasis on her marriage and they could reconcile. We could find out that what we know so far is just the tip of the iceberg and she is even worse than it seems so far (hanging up on her husband when he needed her etc). So far, all we know is that the wife is wrapped up in her job and takes the husband for granted. Maybe not picture perfect but fairly understandable depending on what we find out next. Lots of guys do this irl and nobody derides them. In fact, Ive read comments from lots of people on this site berating authors for using lack of attention from the husband as the wife's excuse for infidelity or divorce ('husband is doing what he needed to do to earn money for his family - she should have supported him instead of having an affair'). Not saying the husband shouldnt divorce her if he feels its necessary. He should definitely leave if he's not happy and she shows no signs of wanting to fix things. Just because he's not happy it doesnt make the wife a monster based on what we know though.<p><p>

Anyway, I thought it was a good start except it was a bit short imo. I can understand why the author broke here (see above about it going anywhere from here), but I think stories should be a couple of pages at least if they are going to be in chapter form like this. Im not a big fan of delayed gratification but, if the author thinks its necessary, he/she should make the first chapter long enough to get the reader involved with the characters and plot. Gotta set the hook before you let them run. <p><p>

Still looking forward to seeing what happens next though. Thanks much for writing author.

Dear author, that was the wrong question: Her father should have asked: "What does Arthur say?"

You are very sloppy with numbers, and by the way, vice president in a major bank is not such a high position as you may think.

I'm game, the business with the age discrepancy is too small a thing to disc the story for. I agree that this will be hard to fix without wimping out the husband. Please continue the story, let's see what you've got.

<p>The problem with a glaring error like the age problem is: you look at it with an open mouth (at about 5AM I was trying to do the math, rather unsuccessfully I might add--- how old was she? I asked). And then I kept thinking about the age problem as I read the story. It was damn distracting.</P.

<p>Okay, that being said, along with another comment that I thought about: just about every bank I know has as many vice presidents as tellers, so it wasn't <i>that</i> big a deal to get the job, still the story was okay. I'll read the next chapter, though I do hope the author takes more care in editing this one.</p>

This first chapter, by a first-time contributor, makes a promising beginning. We simply don't know yet what is going to happen, and I look forward to finding out.

But OMG, what a lot of complainers and nay-sayers are out there! One mistake, about Jennifer's age, and you guys are out to hang the author! Lighten up, why don't you? Give the guy a chance to tell his story before you nail him to the cross.

If it were up to some of the readers here, Tolstoy and Dickens would never have published a book!

ohio

Already it's been noted, but she would either have to be 42 or only have worked at the bank for eight to ten years. Accidents happen like this to the best of us though so I overlooked this error and read the story as if she were 42...and it all fit.

A good story that holds my attention and keeps me wondering what's next for this couple. Please continue this one and don't lose heart. You have the makings of a good author.\

The age problem could have been rectified by switching 8 years for 18 years. Thus you would have a 32 year old woman with a college degree and an MBA who joined the bank at age 24 and over the next 8 years rose to a VP position. The same thing would apply to the length of time she has known Arthur.******

Wanting 4 children at Jennifer's age is not entirely unrealistic. But it would have been better to suggest that the desire for 4 kids was a simple yearning and that realistically she would settle for 2 which would be doable even in her job as VP- International Business.******

The largest problem is that the author has not taken the time or has not cared enough to notice two glaring errors. Although the the idea of the story is good the execution of the plot line doesn't bode particulaly well for future installments.

There are two ways to take the question of whether Arthur knows. It’s either very good writing or bad writing.

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If it is an intentional choice of the writer, “Does Arthur know?” obviates the need to describe at any length her lack of effort toward the relationship.

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In that brief three-word phrase we’re told she thinks so much about herself that her husband is an afterthought. We’re also told that it’s so obvious that everyone recognizes it but her. We’re told it has been going on so long that it allows others to make the assumption that she didn’t even give him a thought; that she never considers him except to the extent he can further her goals or intensify the glory of her. For someone else to say it might betray their attitude toward her. For her father to say it means he recognizes the sad facts and knows he’s more likely to be reminding her than seeking real information (How does Arthur feel about it?).

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Despite the glaring age error and the odd use of “cabin”, it is difficult to judge whether the phrasing of the question was inadvertent. The author went on at length about her failings in her own voice despite all the three-word question implied. But that could be writing inexperience.

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Reserve judgment about the writing and read it for what it’s worth.

for a while. We have a first time author here. Lets wait till the plot develops a bit more. I agree that we have a couple of drafting gaffes, but we all know what was intended.

I'm ok for now and look forward to reading the next sections. Keep writing and submitting. Bob

Even though the author is in India, the age issue is too extreme to ignore. The 18 year marriage is possible, but the employment is not. Otherwise, good read.

I simply ignored the age issue and enjoyed the story. We have no evidence at this point that she screwed her way up the ladder. In fact it appears that she was so driven by the idea of becoming a vp that she totally neglected her husband and that he has finally decided to move on to something better. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

This could be a 5 or 1... Hoping for the best,,

Loving Wive's category is one of my favorites because of the emotions that are shown USUALLY in this genre. I like to see how an author crafts an old plot, then gives it a twist, making the story his/her own. So this story has gotten to a good start when you can see that the author already has attracted so many comments...

To be sincere the age issue got under my radar, but then again, math was never one of my favorite subjects. What I am curious about is how the author is going to develop this story since his complaint or plot is based on a woman's ambission to the point that she relegated her husband to the success of her job. As a woman, this made me blink...So since this time the shoe is on the other foot - I want to see what is so wrong about that...maybe she's a slob, maybe she's a dud in bed, maybe she has ammnesia...I'm looking forward to the rest of this story. Great start!

Whatever happens in the rest of the story, it seems to me the beginning is rushed and unconvincing. The writers gives us too much information about the wife's promotion and too little about what led up to hubby's decision to call it quits. One notes the husband made his decision to divorce without knowing about the promotion and how that might impact the marriage.

I liked the start of your story and I need not mention age or anything about grammar. I am glad to see a new writer and you seem to have a very high strung wife and an obviously worn out husband. The emotions this woman sends off almost seem like she panics with a change of things around her? Just a first impression on my part. Not a real good response by a leader.<P>I find it exceedingly strange the secretary would not remind the boss of the husband, and if she truly forgot him and did all the calls she did she doesn’t value him as important in my mind.<P>I am looking forward to your next chapter and thank you for the good entertainment so far.<P>PT

Given all the criticism, I still thought this was a good beginning to a story.I hope you'll continue to see if the wife can dig herself out of 8 or 15 or 18 years of total devotion to her career and total disregard for her husband. Nice start.

60 year old George

...just to see if another chapter had been written and sent in. Does that tell you how I felt about your story? The beginning wasn't perfect but how many are? Don't be discouraged ... there are more unthoughtful critics than good writers.

did'nt realise in the states you people start work at 14 yrs old? be serious, it does not give this story any credibility! How can the character be 32 yrs old and have worked for 18 yrs in a bank... Don't think so!!

Great start please continue

She's 32, been working for 18 years, and is now the VP. I didn't know you could get to be VP of a bank without a degree, which, unless she is a genius, she can't get until she's 22.

Other than that, I liked the story, and am looking forward, very much, to the next chapter(s).

A good story is like good sex. You can never have enough foreplay and let me tell you, this is one story I am looking forward to. Yesm the timeline is very skewed and for being so smart, the wife seems a bit dense...but all that can be forgiven and explained in a number of ways. What I loved about your story was the subtle but telling nuances, the description of the events in such a way as to make it seem real. Thanks, looking forward to the next chapter.

I know that our comments are welcome and even probably looked forward to. Both good and bad comments will reflect on your story but only you need be true to your writing.

I bet Arthur knows she has been screwing the company to get that position and he got tired of her attitude.

It is called FUCKING you way to the TOPP

I read literotica and loving wives pretty regularly and i completely missed this. on a site with so many writers and stories it's easier to do than you think. i'n going to read the next three chapters when i finish this post, but I can already tell that this is a writer with a future. As somebody mentioned she (a female writer?) grabbed readers' attention with her first story. The dates and ages are a big enough hole to drive an 18-wheeler through, but honestly, most readers are just going to figure it was a glitch and give her 8 or 10 years (not many 14-year-olds working in banks) and not worry about it. I didn't. The writer had a great lede and is going to suck up readers almost automatically. You receive the best news of your life and your husband is the VERY last person you think to tell. The first chapter pretty much sets up the entire story and does it in a way you couldn't otherwise in five chapters. This is a woman with a SERIOUSLY fucked up marriage. But the way the author writes it, I don't get the sense she's screwing her way to the top, she's a nympho, or she hates her husband. Could be but I don't get that. What I see is a woman whose marriage is and has been on auto pilot for a long time, a woman who thinks she loves her husband but obviously doesn't because love isn't just an emotion. You act on love, you do things because you love people. The central character's husband and relationship isn't even an after thought. Still, I don't dislike her. I just think, and thought even before he asked for the divorce, that this was going to be a BIG BIG day in her life for more reasons than she was aware of. Short: I liked it very much.

The protagonist is 32. After 18 years of struggle she makes VP. That means that she started at the bank when she was 14. Sure.

I read this tale about a year ago under another authors name which raises the question did you change your name & just re-post a old story or ????

As pointed out, she's 32. This is probably a mistake.. In the past I think you could have got employed by a bank at the age of 16 without a degree, but I don't think you would at 14! I would understand if she's actually 34 (18 years of service). That would mean that 15 years ago would have been her first engagement with her husband at the age of 19. It sounds plausible if it's just an age mistake. The only other thing is that the guy waited 15 years... gosh ... he must have been waiting for a big payback where she'd devote the rest of her life to him. Unfortunately for him it's not realistic. I get the feeling he should have left long ago.. :(

If it was a guy it would be normal. Take the promotion fuck your husband.

She has been with both the bank and husband for 18 years and she is 32. Getting married and working at the bank at age 14 doesn't see possible. And, she can't be older than 32 if she hope to have 4 children.

"No. Its work... something I started around 15 years ago... ends today."

He waits 15 yrs so that he can screw up her big day? This guy belongs in a loony bin. Ditch the dick head!

This is what I obtained in my recent activity inbox:

On November 29, 2011 Anonymous comment on your story Everything for the Career Ch. 01:

Ditch the dick head!

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Obviously, following the link, I did not see that comment anywhere.

It seemed somehow that Lito was not displaying it.

Instead, I get an email from whoever posted this comment, that I am a 'wanker' and that I delete comments not suited for me.

Well, I cannot force someone to believe, but I have never moderated any comments. If you reach out below, you can see as many lousy comments about me and the story as there are good ones.

I think that hate, with love, as an author is to be expected.

If you, Anonymous, are the commentor of the above comment, I'd like you to send me your email id in the next private message to me.

Yes, you can call me an arrogant wanker in public. I will not mind.

Thanks, and hope that resolves your query.

HHLa

How can she be 32 and have worked for the company for 18 years? There's no way since minimum age for work is 16 and if she has worked there for 18 years, she would've started when she was 14. Also, they've been married for 15 years, meaning she got married when she was 17. Did you get your numbers correct?

I've been reading Literotica for almost a year. I noticed that in "several stories writers used "drug" when they mean "drag". Don't any of your editors ever find these errors?

Neither one are likeable. She screamed when hubby came home? Screamed? And she's a vice president? And she screamed? Whatever.

Either he's upset that his wife has accomplished more in her career than he has or he suspects she did special deeds only allowed for him the husband to get ahead. Like I said, interesting. We'll see...

apart from the slight errors...most sensitive story ive read in this catagory!

Definitely got my interest. Thanks.

How could this be possible? Age 32, working for the past 18 years hoping to get so high on the career ladder from age 14? I don't find any of this believable. Do the basic math first!

It seems it's all about "ME" to this selfish bitch. We were warned at the prolog. Let's see what the next chapter holds. Cheers!

Due to the fact that we only have a very limited amount of verified information. I find it fascinating that so many commentators know more than the reader or the protagonist..... Nicely set up. My thanks to the author

Um...she is at LEAST 40 years old.

Her chances of miscarriage is at least 1 in 4. And she wants four kids NOW when she has even more responsibility?

I get what the author is trying to do here. Maybe it's just giddiness on her part.

I like the concept of the story so far however, though I don't understand why her hubby is a train wreck when it's obvious he's known some things for a decade and a half.

better hope you can still make the sauce, TK U MLJ LV NV

She is 32, been working for 18 yrs. Hmmm... isn't that against the law?

Jennifer said too many things over and over. Even if Arthur had put in a long day, how did he come to look so disheveled? Are we to assume she is really 32 (Hence, she still has time to have four children.) and the 18 years of employment is in error? I'll read at least one more chapter to see if I feel it will be worthwhile to read the entire story.

Read the rest of the story and 18 years work makes sense

This is an exceptionally good story, not only for the site, but among the thousands of novels I've read.

the the others have to bear. TK U MLJ LV NV

Thanks for the offering.

The story begins with her at age 32 having worked 18 years for the bank. Ok so that means she started at that wicked old bank at age 14. No wonder the husbands pissed off she missed her entire childhood.

Author's bio does not mention the author's sex or native land. One commenter said the author was female, another said s/he was from India. Also author's first story, per DQS1. Maybe "cabin" translates from whatever his/her native tongue is for "cubicle". How many of you can do arithmetic in a foreign language???? As an example, what is XXVIII (or another variant, XXIIX) from XXXII???

Give the author some slack, assholes!

but was 32? That means she started at 12? What kinda bank is this? anybody here of child labor laws? And she was in her cabin, working offsite but then mysteriously when she gets the news has a secratary, coworkers, etc all congratulating her.

She gets home and calls hubby, sometime after 7:30pm, and he is still at work? She asks him to come home early? Wtf kinda work ethic do these people have? When do they spend any time together?

She was 32. She even mentioned wanting four children. But if she had been working at the bank for 18 years she had to have been 14 when she started. I placed my job ahead of my wife, and now I have neither.

Ignoring the impractical basic math (what international bank hires a 14 year old?), there’s nothing shocking. You don’t make VP by age 32 without putting friends and family at a very low priority. Even if she didn’t go extra-curricular at the office, the husband was treated as though he’s furniture: always there to fall on after a bad day, relied upon, but generally neglected. Apparently he’s tired of being invisible, and waited for her to be high on herself to deliver his news. AND SHE DESERVED IT.

you gotcha' punks might want to read part 2 for your math answers.

Terrific beginning! *****

As just about every other reader has commented, she must have started work when she was 14. Sure gives a whole new meaning to "career orientated". And then later we find her husband has been trying for 18 years to get her to give him a blow job, so she's married to a pedophile as well.

And all her friends and close family members congratulate and bless her. Shit, I've had promotions too but I don't think anyone has ever "blessed" me. Is she actually a VIP in the Church of the Holy Profit? (Don't answer that - it's a bank so this description has some validity).

But probably not, because I think she's actually dead and the story is set in some sort of 7th dimension where she is all-seeing. How else to explain that when she talks on the phone to her dad she knew he had tears in his eyes. Hell, if she could see the tears in his eyes then why even bother with the phone? Just use telepathy like everyone else in the 7th dimension (by the way, if I was a character in this story then I think I'd also have tears in my eyes from self-loathing).

And as for her pedophile husband, why is she so apologetic for not telling him earlier? Couldn't she have been wanting to surprise him when he got home? And the regret this causes, oh the regret! The regret is so bad she felt it rise from the BASE of her SPINE. Not from the third vertebrae as most of us feel it, (or is it the 5th? - can't quite remember) or from the bottom of her heart, but from the BASE of her SPINE! Wow, that really is pretty high on the regret scale, and only feeling it from the soles of one's feet is higher.

This story is so over-written and over-wrought that the cliché-generator must have been overheating. Sorry, I can't continue with the other chapters because I'm laughing too much.

Now how do you feel? Her family failed to support her? Should a man's family move with him when he gets promotion? Why?

She's been with her husband since she was 14.

She's been working at the company since she was 14.

She works in a cabin.

The author clearly purchased wholesale while shopping at the exclamation point store.

This is usually the man's part in this story. An interesting reversal.

Instead of writing from the long neglected husband’s pain, it’s from the single minded viewpoint of his selfish wife.

18 years and they haven’t had kids? She killed his best years for fatherhood. Then there’s her incredible shortsightedness: VPs don’t make great new moms. The job requires MORE time, not less. The expectations are higher.

What a bitch!

I can’t get into it. Too simplistic and not well thought out. She’s 32 and been married and with the bank for 18 years. So she married and started working at age 14. And what’s with the cabin?

So Jennifer started working at the bank when she was 14 years old???!!!

You need an editor

Well written but for the age goof up.

I presume she is 42. Then it makes sense.

I like the build up especially since there is no cheating as of now.

She's 32...said she worked there for 18 years...so they were letting her cash people checks and hand out loans at 14?

Femdom agitprop, career woman finds success at the expense of her marriage, family, husband and unborn children. But, there’s trouble at home tonight. Story is off to a good start…

Wife wants a career husband divorced her an I missing something a should I quit my job. Women have a right to work an be successful fgs