All Comments on 'Examiner'

Great story line! I enjoyed the in depth descriptions of the man's gentialia, that's rare on this site. Perfect story for us ladies to enjoy! I will definitely go back ad read your other works and look forward to more. 5*s

That's a lot of pussy eating for a porn audition. Either that guy has zero clue about what it means to chow down on a strange porn starlet's box or it really must be love, cuz he should probably hit the clinic up after that meal.

You have long paragraphs of narrative without any dialogue. Where's the dialogue? Where's the action? You lecture to the reader. You tell the reader but don't show the reader. Writers use imagery for a reason, you don't have any imagery in your just narrative and more narrative.

You're having sex with talking heads? What are their names? How about a description? What do they look like? I can't bond with your characters because I don't see or feel your characters. I really don't give a crap about your story because there is no story. You really suck as a writer.

The best thing you can do for yourself is to stop writing until you take a course in creative writing to learn how to write.