All Comments on 'Exhibitions Ch. 02'

Even if you did change the wording a little, switching it to her pillow muffling it.

So, let's see here, clicking on my French to English translator...

'Qu'est-ce qu'ils font ici? Merde, je ne veux pas des soucis, j'ai tout juste gagne cette position'

...came back as...

'That is what they are doing here? Shit, I do not want concerns, I have just win this position.'

Bwaaaa! I definitely need to learn French!

Btw, as your editor, I am ashamed to see that I missed 'love-making,' which should have been 'lovemaking.' Please tell me you added that AFTER we were through? :grins sheepishly:

Also, it's time you began using Alt/0151 (holding down the Alt key while hitting 0151) to create real emdashes — instead of using these -- for emdashes.

Okay, those niggles aside, I really love this chapter. Your game with Marcel was inspired. In and of itself it was always going to be a hot little scene anyway, yet it was the skill with which you narrated it that really made it excel for me. The imagery was properly vivid, and the glimpses into their thoughts as they did their unspoken three-way dance was excellent. Like I told you before, I only wish you would've carried that scene out much longer; not necessarily to the point of sex or anything, but I wanted a lot more sexy gamesmanship between Van and Anna before Marcel finally blew his load—which still cracks me up to no end, the notion that you decided to conclude the scene by having the poor guy abruptly shoot off in his pants and hightail it outta there!

Yep, I would've loved at least an entire additional page or two devoted to that one scene. If it were up to me, I'd STILL be reading, rather than typing this missive.

Love this chapter, Anna. You really have something great working here. And yes, you will have to treat me to some poutine. ;-)

This is a nice combination of hot and romantic, with a lot of humor thrown in. Nicely done! :)

First, I love the new name of the series. It fits on so many levels. Second, I love that it IS now a series, and that there's going to be more chapters to come.

Totally loved the interaction with Marcel. I can relate to Marcel; Anna could do that to any man. I also liked how Van used the opportunity wiht Marcel to test Anna and how Anna seemed to test Van right back. Exploring those boundaries can be so exhilarating.

Very well done, Annanova. Can't wait for the next one.

Bravo Your story has motivated me to consider going to Montreal. I run a business as a vendor at beer festivals. Cheers RH