by DocCIS
Wow! You are definitely a professional quality writer. This was a very well written and enthralling story. I can’t wait to read the next chapters!
5 stars! This was a wonderful erotic long read. I read the first five pages and then reached for my rabbit! A must read for when you're alone with your thoughts about having a lover, FWB, hall pass, the itch or temptation.
To those wondering about getting more chapters, unfortunately there will be none... Did a little investigation and found on his Patreon page, a message from his daughter that Bill (DocCIS) passed away suddenly in Dec 2017. I appreciated his talent and will miss the conclusions to this work and others that remain unfinished .....RIP Doc
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Checking length and Way too much for me. If can't tell it in 7 pages a chapter good BYE
Hi, can any reader here suggest similar stories? thanks!
One of the best stories I ever read. I love the way you describe her conflict, being reluctant to the situation but given in to her passion. Looking forward reading more from you!
I really enjoyed this story and your writing style also. You could use an editor but so could most stories in this site! I really like your characters and the way you flesh them out. But....no way could Suzanne get up from that bar and walk after drinking 12 or 13 glasses of wine.....so far! Looking forward to reading the rest now...Thanks
The first page of the first chapter is the best part! Such a promising start the reader is willing to read and read and read but after a while I gave up. Yes so nice phrases but unless your being paid by the word, why so drawn out? I give up, to much effort to find the bits and pieces of good story.
First, thank you for your comments!
If you find any errors, I'm always welcoming people pointing them out so I can update them and such...just send them in FEEDBACK and I can upload a corrected version.
Thanks again!
A few spelling/grammar errors, but such an amazing story that I barely even care.
Thank you so much! Hope you enjoy B and C as well!
Right now not sure what story is coming out next...although I'm working on a commission I hope to have out soon. You can check on teasers and progress on my blog site if interested...
Thanks again!
Really amazing story Doc! I loved it. I look forward to reading the other chapters.
Ugh, hate renovations!
As I said, hopefully the next two parts will fill in the need to read more sex, LOL...particularly Part 3 which is mostly that ;)
Thanks again!
You are right. I enjoyed the story very much, and I wanted for Henry what I wanted for my self. Who said it, leave them wanting more. unless its me wanting more sex.
Now to find time to read more. We are renovating the bath, 1/2 done.
Thoroughly enjoyed this story, of all the stories I've read, this has simply been the most enjoyable, now looking towards reading the next chapters...thank you
no wham-bam but a slow and easy titillation
A Five Star Classic
Look forward to the upcoming chapters
...and thank you
Sorry to disappoint...although I think you'll fine Part's 2 and 3 more to your liking.
Actually I'm proud you are disappointed, as the story left you wanting more...which is what any storyteller would want. But as I said, parts 2 and 3 should hopefully sway your opinion a bit more favorably... ;)
If this were my story, Henry would not of gone home alone. A night cap is still something to share amongst friends. David could easly slip aside and let suzanne properly reward her champion for the day. Well David you had your chance. I like the dual story line, but after twenty pages a climatic ending might be my choice. You can see I'm no writer. I do like reading.
Thanks a good story.
I'm looking up your òther §tories.
First, thank you very much! Although I haven't posted much, you can tell from my blog site I have been somewhat busy on that front, and with the new Patreon site, that work has increased from the added incentives...
Lapdancing is still on the burner to be completed. I have all of EC parts 2 and 3 completed in rough draft form and trying to get them out before Patreon bills and I have to work on the Tier 7 requests...so you should see all the parts released within the next few weeks.
Then the focus is on my new Lifeguard story...as that is the direction given by my current Tier 7 supporter... I'm sure there will eventually be a Tier 7 request for Lapdancing, hehehe...it's too popular a story NOT to get that...but for now, going where the Patreon pledges take me!
Appreciate the comments and welcome back!
Good to see you back with a new story. Preferred Lapdancing, but this has been enjoyable as well.
I know sometimes a story isn't for everybody, and I do feel bad when people don't like a story (beyond the TLDR type things, hehehe).
Lapdancing will be coming, but for the next two months my focus is going to be on whatever my current patrons on Patreon are requesting. I have to top tiered donations so my attention will be directed towards their requests before I focus back upon Diamond and the rest of Lapdancing....
I wanted to like it, but dammmmmmn that is tedious. Way over written.
And the two major characters, the husband and wife, are so fucking stupid that I wanted to choke them.
Please write more of Lapdancing Girlfriend.
Glad to see another piece. Probably the best story I've read on this site this year. Please keep writing.
Appreciate the comments! I always am nervous when a long chapter is released, and although I've gotten a few "too long, instant 1 star" type comments, they were all anonymous and did not add any helpful criticism...so glad to see somebody at least didn't mind the length!
As Skipper mentioned above, you can always find me on my blog and if feeling extremely generous, my Patreon site (URL's in profile).
The build up is breathless... always worth reading...
Another guaranteed story ...
DOCcis: Read this story from start to finish. Look forward to reading the other chapters soon. I though the tie into the Lapdancer stories was well done. Will also post a more detailed comment on your "Blog"
Thank U
Skipper.
Welcome back to the land of LIT can't wait for part two, any chance you can tell the readers where they can go for updates on whats to come.