by MarvinS
The first husband was a wimp now the second one is a fag, now I know who not to read.
but until the next soltices. TK U MLJ LV NV
I liked the author toying with my preconceptions of the ending. End analysis is this was a weird read & that's how I like it !
Ouch! Stop making side comments to the readers, stop putting your male leads in panties, stop having the female leads sleeping with their brothers, stop creating soul-less characters who don't value marriage or each other.
I see you have been a member of Literotica for a total of seven days now. You must be a really quick reader to be able to judge a story as being the "worst" on this site. I am sorry to don't like men to wear panties. However, it is a bit heartening to see that you think married people should respect their spouses and marriage. Joe after he reformed did indeed respect his marriage and was not exactly pleased to learn that his wife was unfaithful.
I almost didn't read the rest. okkay, I still didn't read the rest, I only read the last few paragraphs to see if it was worth it. It wasn't. I'm a fan of all three types of LW endings you mention, when they're warranted. This was none of them. This was an attempt to gain a wider readership of incest and cross-dressing stories by trying to fit them in a square hole.
Atempt failed. You are technically a good writer, but please put your posts where they belong--or at least warn the reader.
I don't like stories in which none of the characters are likable. Most readers don't. You might have pulled this off if were funnier, but instead of that we get panties and brother-sister incest. Both of which were done in non-erotic ways and were just kind of thrown out there. We get a horn dog with a husband abuser. What's to like here? I get it that you were pushing the envelope a little and having fun with the reader. Unfortunately, the reader didn't have any fun with the story.
Did not like. Looking forward for your next story. Thanks for sharing.
I knew in emails that the chick was crazy but this takes the cake.if she was still married to mark would this have happened? doubt it. so the chick and joe need serious help. And really girls panties and no one but his sister knew, ya right I don't care how big his dick is when that got he would be someone's bitch.
Good luck on the next story
The incest and panty fetish made much more sense after reading two other of the author's stories. They were published in categories other than Loving Lives. There's "My Sister's Panties," and erotic story that depictes Joe's love of panties. There's "Best Since My Sister" in which AJ has sex with her brother MJ. Ohj, Joe might have been a more likable character if it were Bill or something -- someone other than the panty hound in "Hi, I'm Joe."
It is interesting to note that the stories in the non-loving wives categories got higher ratings than the Loving Wives ones. Loving Wives readers must be a tough audience.
Hey if that's what you're into more power to you. I just wish I hadn't read about it.
HA Ha ha
For this sorry tale of cheaters to even be plausible. Not one of your characters elicits even a shred of emotions from the reader. They're just there on the page, doing silly things. Maybe an editor might help.
"By the neck until dead" would be good enough for MJ. IMO.
With his reputation for attracting women, he should have dumped the temperamental bitch and moved on to some one else.
Well, that was one totally fucked up price of crap, and that's being nice.