All Comments on 'Falling for Brenda'

A nice idea. The story had an excellent potential and a nice conflict in it. But it was rushed and includes a lot of TELLING (Narrative Summary) instead of SHOWING. That really spoils it.

I thin th Idea is good, It’s really worth rewriting.

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I loved your story..I thought I was reading part of my life story...

no truer words were ever spoken."I learned from our relationship and it changed the way I look at women."