All Comments on 'Falling Snow Ch. 02'

It's a good story. It feels like that Succubi in erotica is so common, they lose their threat, like vampires and werewolves. The nice part about this is that you are showing that there is a present danger when dicking around with the supernatural, something I don't see in the demon tales from the nonhuman and SciFi/Fantasy sections.

Also, there was a part in the middle between Tom and Shy gating to locations that was completely different and came out of nowhere, with little transition. I was confused when i read it, and would have appreciated a smoother transition, something not quite so "I have this important bit for horror and I don't know where to put it so here it goes".

Too short. Keep up the good work

I'm a writer too and have three books to show for it. But I must say that you have potential with this story and I admire your courage to continue on a site filled with haters. So don't be discouraged by the people that only know how to tear down & not build! Good luck!

I'm looking forward to more

Really great work, immensly enjoy your work, can't wait until cha. 3

Keep on going. Loved it.

This is good stuff! Looking forward to chapter 3.

Wow, these stories are really good, can't wait for number 3!

More please! Soon please!

Could use some better proof-reading to be better.

(But do I want you to get to be professional grade when I can read your work here for free?)

Actually, It's already been uploaded. It's waiting for approval from the literotica staff, so it might be up as early as tomorrow.

This could also fit in the humor category. Fun to read!

Interesting story! Love the whole concept in general so far

Interesting sequel, I'm curious to see where this goes