by Teufelstochter
War and Peace is long too but nobody needs to read the lot in one go.
I thought this story was very hot (and really didn't mind the length!), but thought there were two annoying low-level problems with the writing which kept distracting me as I read. The bigger one is that some of the chapters switched without warning between first person and third person narration. The smaller one is that there were a lot of little punctuation errors --- missing periods at the ends of sentences, mis-placed commas, etc. These didn't really weaken the _story_ but they kept throwing me out of it, and a little editing might have made it much better.
This story has it all, not many subjects were missed and running a family porn business is a very cool idea. I do think it would have been better broken into the individual chapters, but that's up to the author. Great story, I hope to see more soon.