by tktom
I think the series is doing pretty well. The development is still interesting. But the title of the series hasn't really matched the content very well.
like the story still waiting for the next chapter(s)
I want to see whats next with Dave and Ann. And then the whole family.
Can't wait to see who gets virgin Ann, brother or dad. Should be dad, with his wifes assistantce I think. But, that's just me. Keep writing, but stop jacking off while you write, your typing goes to hell.lol
Great story line. And each chapter gets better. Hope you keep developing this one. I'd love to see Dave and Ann go farther, not to mention Dave and Lucy. And we haven't meet the other family yet.
Well done, tktom: a few typos, but it's lovely erotic story of initiation, through reluctant interest, to exploration, to loss of inhibition, to flaming passion. Only criticism is that it's not ended: what happens between Ann and Dave, Ann and daddy, and Ann and Lucy? There are more chapters waiting to be written!