All Comments on 'Family Comfort Ch. 03'

loving this story and hope you can keep going with it. many thanks

So he could turn out to be a grandad/great grandad. :-)

Anything is possible, Anonymous :-)

Keep looking, Turtle, more chapters are in the pipeline for approval MP2

Mother a bigger turn on than admitting to a sexual attraction

I think you are using spellcheck too much. You have a few mistakes in this one and listed instead of listened along with the other correctly spelled but wrong words makes proofreading necessary. I am a great proofreader and I can point out everything you need to fix if you like. The one other thing is that the transition on your last sentence is too short. You should have mentioned whether or not Claude had forgotten Motherfucker or was still thinking about it as he moved out of the shower. Some reference to activity in the shower at least would have been a better segue to your announcement of preparing for the mortuary at the end of the sentence. Finish strong. :D I am a writer too and just mean to help. I really do enjoy your writing and story.

I appreciate the constructive comments. Proofreading is a difficult task. I am glad you are excellent. MP2

I hope you will have Uncle Claude tell the secret of Sally's birth father.

No spoilers here... Read to conclusion, then look for FAMILY DEVELOPMENT. Also, FAMILY WEEKEND is in the works, but, be careful if you are a true devotee of timelines. :-) MP2

And then there's sister daughter

what a fun, sexy tease. i'm enjoying the build-up. 5 stars! very clever story - so far!