All Comments on 'Family Comfort Ch. 08'

eagerly awaiting the next chapter

Turtle, Megan does seem to be pretty nice girl. :-) MP2

Please continue your story it's amazing

Hyperlizard. More chapters are in the works. Working on Ch 11 right now :-)

The plot of your story is great, but your execution is lacking. A perfect example is how Claude revealed to Sally that he is really her father, and her reaction to the news. You should have devoted an entire chapter to that, maybe more. Instead we got two paragraphs of lame conversation that boils down to "surprise, I'm your dad" "that's awesome, I love you Daddy!".

Also, you should have kept Megan out of it. I stopped reading at that point and I no longer care where this story is headed.

You're a decent writer though, and I'll probably check out some of your other stories.

NOW I'M CONVINCED I WOULDN'T WANT HIM AROUND MY FRIENDS EITHER!

YEAH, I KNOW IT'S A FANTASY STORY!

Megan throws herself at him! What's a fella to do? :-) MP2

I just don't see any reason for it. The situation was complex and complicated enough already.

I agree with others, the oops moment was way too casual for so important a subject. As was Sally's reaction.

...to Irishmike's criticism, with which you seem to agree, regarding the 'Oops moment.' Claude's unintended tongue-slip had to be dealt with when Sally caught it, but he was off-guard and was, in fact, hoping to keep it 'casual' and therefore more readily acceptable. For her part, Sally (like many people) carries her own baggage and filters the world through a very personal lens. She has already fucked her known brother and thinks she may be pregnant. Her reaction was an emotional doubling down on the ACCEPTANCE of a new UNDERSTANDING of her already very strong positive feelings (i.e. LOVE) for Claude. As for Megan - she is a budding sybarite. Thank you for your comments and I hope you enjoy the entire arc of Claude's story. :-) MP2

Claude tells Sally he's her dad as well as her brother and then they just go off to the gym - separately? seems a little strange! but its a great tale. 5 stars