All Comments on 'Family of Love'

Nice start but a one page teaser come on man

But I broke with my norm and gave you two....don't let us down.

Nice start but you really need to proof read before you submit a story.

Good idea, but a bit rushed. And I'm thinking that English is not your native language. That's fine, you just might want to find a good editor. Keep writing this and more!

You need an editor, but still a good read.

I sure hope there will be more. I agree with the others.. A proof reader would make the story an even better read.

dear friend,

i was searing a story like this but finally i read your story. i like it very much but disappointed that there is no sex scenes. please make it complete or wright anew like: a brother and sister kniws that their parents are sibling. the parents encourage their kuds to make a family like them. even mim pregnant by son and dau by daddy.. my mail id. odiaapua@gmail.com

i dont care if he just lost his "grandfather", there is no way on gods green earth he goes anywhere with anyone unless its to a hospital bed because the shock shut his system down and he himself collapsed. do we not understand how trauma and shock work on a fundamental level when it comes to mental health? this kid just got the shock of his life, besides the fact that he can not trust anyone in his family after being lied to for so long and you have him just casually go with his "mom"? hahahahahaha yeah ok.

reasonable story but shame about wrong words in wrong places, missed words in sentences, way off grammar, but hey ho, we cannot all get it right first time. I suggest a proof reader & an editor