All Comments on 'Family Surprises Ch. 01'

Excellent story, well written and very horny.

I loved your story. I love your use of nasty young girls. Please submit more stories involving more incest, gaping and plenty of ass to mouth/pussy to mouth and ass to pussy. More families could be created some even with twin girls. This was the best story I have read in about 3 years.

Loved it!! Loved all of it. Want a story with mommy, daddy adn daughter maybe even son. Of course more with her friends and mommy and daddy. Made me wet hot and horny for a hard hung Daddy!!

When is Ch 02 coming out?

Hottest story I've ever read here. Please write Chapter 2 soon.

Chapter TWO please...Damn you have to continue this! Inquiring minds NEED to know what happens to these people...

Please go through and fix the typos! "berried" instead of "buried", "count" instead of "cunt", etc. It is a good read....

...it's a hot, hot story that we want more of soon!

i got so horny i went into my dads room and fucked him, my pussy got soooo wet that night, now though, im finally out of prison for rape, never knew girls could rape!

Fuck man! u really know how to turn people on!

plz continue this ... i certainly want to read more of it n very soon.

had me hard from start to cumming

GREAT STORY AND WOULD MAKE ANY COCK HARD OR PUSSY WET. YOU SHOULD MAKE A SEQUEL WITH MOM AND BRING THE WHOLE THING OUT INTO ONE INSANE ORGY!!!

There were lots of spelling errors that kind of detract from the story. Get someone to proofread it before you submit. Sorry, kind of a pet peeve.

it is a great story that it's reaching its own climax, but not yet. i agree with the proofreading. and since you already introduced the idea of the mom with amand and jenny watching, a giant orgy scene comes to mind. it would be a great closure and it will bring the story to its potential. i loved it!

Please keep going. I can not wait to see how you bring Mom into the story. And of course daughters anal loving.Maybe mom using a strapon?

More

I LOVE THIS STORY BECAUSE I want to FUCK my DAUGHTER too.

Since Mom is obviously deviant as well, perhaps Daddy and daughter need to keep fucking and maybe start their own family?

An idea for future chapter(s)....

Great story! Loved the plot. Lets have some MORE!

Naughty!Nasty! Cock-stiffening erotica.More please

Loved it! Sexiest thing I have read on here for a while.

most erotic...

plz come up with a sequel with lots of anal bang-bang!

involve the mom & get in somee young bloke to ram it up her ass...

eagerly awaiting the sequel

Nice piece of writing!

Very erotic! Leaves you wanting more! Hope to see more in this series!

Thanks for the read!

Sexmate

Very nice! You've written my fantasy! I'm amazed at your writing skill. Thank you very much!

Please have follow up on this one I can see where it can get hot and hotter

Dad's got to bang her and her friend in the ass

Very sexy and erotic! Hope you continue this series.

god you gotta carry this one on.... i wanna read aboutthat slut mom getting involved!!!

I loved it I am sooooo wet after reading this!! You have some serious skills and I hope you continue this one! I would love to read more!!!

It is extremely erotic! I loved it. Cannot wait for more on this series.

Excellent!

really loved this one,

the part where the daughter is cuffed by her horney little girlfriend and is dominated en humilliated. amazing.

best piece of slutty nastyness I've read in a long time !

please continue ...

nice....dude you need to part 2 this shit

.....WOW,...A MOVER IS RIGHT,..TRULY ENJOYABLE STORY,....THERE NEEDS TO BE MORE,....MUCH MORE...

Fantastic - fucking the little girl and making her swallow all that thick cum....hmmmm....

I know you're working on other things, but a lot of people would loooooove to see more of this! Please!

This was really well written and in definite need of sequels. There are a lot of places you can go with this. We need to see Amanda seduce the Mom, the Daughter and Mother, and absolutely more Father/Daughter. Also what kind of loving Daughter would she be if she didn't introduce her Dad to some of her HOT young 18 yr old friends. I am sure she could have a slumber party when Mom is out of town and intro the girls to Dad as only she can!

I read this when it was new and just re-read it. Please - there must be more! Have Amanda dominate the whole family. Let her create three slaves who must obey her! Let this be just the beginning!

This has the potential to be as great a series, or even better, than Slut Mommie. Please write more.

AMAZING STORY...one of my favorites, and i LOVE all your others! The first part where he licks the young girl's ass out made me crazy...(since I LOVE giving & receiving, myself!) And the part where he watches Amanda with his daughter...Amanda's nasty talk is so fucking hot. SO much better than other writers. PLEASE write another chapter & include mom!

Please, another chapter! This is one of the best stories on this site!

she was in collage?...jesus man, spell sheck cant fix stupid

This story could easily become another obsession!

I would like to read more chapters in this adventure!!

What's sad about this story is that its been around since 06, and everyone, including myself, want a part two, but it probably won't happen! Sad! But a great story.

Gotta love the "goddamn learn to spell" people. Even for people that can write english ( and not all can...least so well, since this site is viewed in other places beside USA), writting out many pages of porn can be labor intensive. Stories should be more about art (or fappability) then about perfect grammer. Oh yes...the "you didnt cross every T and dot every I" crowd can shove it where the sun dont shine!

Hotest story I ever read.. When is the next chapter coming out?? I am looking forward to more adventures from this family!!!

i find this hard to masturbate to

2011 - Just read this story. Disappointed there was no followup listed under Family Surprises.

Please take time to write another chapter to this story.

What a hellava story! Looking forward to more.

love your stories...when is the next one ...

I like your story. I would advise you to make sure everything is spelled correctly. Please look again.

Reread and still think there needs to be a second chapter so Amanda and Jenny can seduce Jenny's mother and use and abuse her. Also, Jenny's father should catch them and become involved also. What about Amanda's mother? I'm sure Jenny would like her.

You spent the entire story building to Jen's ass, as well as the tryst between Amanda and the wife, and then you stopped? Where is the completion of the story? No matter how you end it, it needs the second chapter. You seldom screw up like this. Come on!!!

when is part 2 out ?

Love the story, well what there is of it anyway, obviously missing chapters! I thought for SURE daddy was going to walk up to his handcuffed daughter and bury his hard cock deep in her ass while her girlfriend held her and pinched her nipples and kissed her! You could just SEE it coming... Then NOTHING. Dammit.

THEN the daughter, who obviously got off like gangbusters with her dad watching, probably fantasizing he was fucking her, up and jack slaps hin and walks off?! HELL NO! I would have slapped her ass right back, then drug her over to the sofa and threw her across my lap, shoved her panties in her mouth and spanked her little ass till she remembered whose house she was in and who was in charge of this mad circus! Lol.

....and as for the bitchy wife? Yanking my hand off and giving me attitude instead of being polite about it, then copping an attitude when I decide to jerk off since she wasnt in the mood... I would have walked around to her side, jacked off and shot it all over her face, then rolled her ass out of bed and onto the floor and told her SHE could go sleep on the fucking sofa.

(Of course then the end of the story would be different, heh.)

Great story, why hadn't there anymore written? Would love toread more of this

Loved the story. Hate it when authors start a series but never continue with it. As chapter one was over ten years old, I wouldn't be holding my breath for chapter two

I really Loved the way Amanda used her on couch. Please make her do something again while Jenny is tied up

This story is soooo unfinished.

Its Sooo Hot, need an update. Let Amanda Dominate Jenny again infront of her dad. like she did on Couch.

Still hoping that you will one day return and write more. Please say that you would return to Lit again!

You are missed

Please write part 2 of this sexy story.

was 12 years ago?

you need to write more of this story, was crazy hot

So damn exciting. Please write the next chapter soonest.

Kept my cock throbbing, wishing I had a slutty teenage daughter like her to fuck.

Hope there is more to come

Need more chapters!

Learn how to spell, moron.

It's a shame that part 2 was never posted for this story as I would have liked to read about how the mother would have been made love to.

Friend, I know this isn't your first story. But college is misspelled, multiple times. A collage is an artistic composition of several materials, put together, as in a photo collage of many different photographs. Hang in there. A lot of people can't spell. BUT YOU are trying to be a writer. You MUST grasp the gravity of spelling in your work. Excellent story. But the spelling takes something from it.

This story demands part 2. The wife needs to be revenge trained, the girlfriend tamed, and full on child bearing incest with the daughter. Please...

I understand why you didn't finish this story and switched to another, which made a big, interesting tale Slut Mommie. But, nevertheless, it is this chapter of an unfinished story that remains one of the strongest texts of this portal. This text transcends pornography and becomes literature full of suspense, feeling, tenderness, and pain. The only thing superfluous here is the description of anal sex at the beginning of the narrator's arrival at the party. The description itself is very effective and strong, both in the pornographic sense and in the literary sense, but it is superfluous and interferes with the overall plot.

Omg I neeed chapter 2 im to invested and tooo horny hottest story ive read yet!

What a shame that this wasn't continued.

OK. How could Jenny suddenly go from not even talking to her dad for 4 weeks to simply walking in and fucking him ? Oh well, it's just fiction . . .