All Comments on 'Far From Me Pt. 01'

Interesting characters with multiple possibilities for future stories. I hope there is at least another story in the pipeline.

Seems like it could be tightened up about 10%. Just a bit too many words. But reads well and has my interest. Looking forward to part two.

Strong characters and setting. But the girlfriend has to change or go, and I don’t see her changing. Thanks.

I can see what you were trying to do, and as it's almost 2 years old my comments make no difference, Lara actually seems ok even for all the negative painting of her character, I have known lots of men and women like this, your man Tom actually comes across as a loser, when he should seem the injured party he appears to be the problem and it's never his fault but every one else, nobody can be that base! I know from your other stories your characters are much stronger. Maybe one day you can lift these up and edit them drop them back in as stronger stories and characters like they deserve. ps I never vote when I comment but would have given you 4 ( and a half if it was on offer)