by QuentinXRandom
Interesting idea, interested to read more. The only thing that really stood out in a bad way was your segue into talking about snuff film buyers, a real downer in an othewise titilating piece of erotica.
If the guards put their dicks in the wives mouths they come back with stumps ending this idiocy. What are they going to do? Kill everyone? Beyond stupid.
The author specifically talks about holes in their gags you moron. Don't abuse the story when you didn't even fucking read it you piece of shit.
Loved and looking forward to more. But gonna agree with a fellow commentee about the snuff segue. Let's do without please
fun read. but it was confusing remembering who was married to who and their colors. itd be very helpful if youd have it maybe up at the top for a quick little reminder. but it was a good story, cant wait for pt. 2
Why must a story about sex devolve into threats of death? Stories that encourage illegal acts don't have a place in good erotica. Which this isn't.
If the couples actually volunteered instead of being forced into this. Making this mostly a rape story from beginning to end. And rape is against the law dear writer. Maybe you should keep that in mind. Or at least let the husbands get their hands on a weapon to use if they want to. Of course that leads to death.
I enjoyed part one, but agree the undertone would appeal to me more if the couples had volunteered. Looking forward to part two.