All Comments on 'Filling for a Friend'

...it was a scene, not a story.....and you got the wrong category.

Jeez, did you think this would be well received?

I got as far as that, 'and because???' Makes no sense the way you've written it, or did you leave something out?

illiterate shit.

What was this? Not a story for sure...Maybe school's break time? Who were these characters? Who cares? Where was the "friend"? Did the writer draw the category randomly from a hat? wasn't it better in "Non-English" category? 1*

But it comes close. I couldn't figure out what was going on or why you would post it in Loving Wives.

Why loving wives?

Don't get disheartened by uncharitable comments. Your first attempt is reasonably good and you seem to have the stuff to get better and better. Keep going. Cheers!

Next time, get an editor.

This is a slut doing a porn flick, why is this in L.W.

The website has many trolls, take the time to ignore those who simply criticize with little input. This work shows potential and some skill, you developed the story a bit and kept the plot stable and flowing. Character development is I believe your next task.

Thank you

To many little boys here that complain about all stories.Grow up and let the adults enjoy the sex.

I think we need more of your stories.

automatic 1*

Way too many errors, let alone being a poor story.

Great way to break in. Xoxoxoxo Annette

The story provided a very great surprise for me. When I got to the end, I found the comments superbly entertaining - keep it up folks!

A fun short story but is she married?

Why bother to read a story when the first sentence makes no sense. Ok. I splurged and read the entire first paragraph. It matched the first sentence.

One business is a local magazine. OK! The other is a soft porn magazine (sometimes) and a video porn videographer (the rest of the time!) First, that is actually an unlikely combo. Our (married?) Heroine apparently works for the first business, but was, in the start of this tale, assisting some models. What kind of 'local magazine' uses models? Advertising agencies use models, and provide material to local magazines!

Our Heroine, without much question, agrees to fill in for an unknown (not a friend, despite the title) actress for the OTHER business - at the request of HER boss! There is some blushing, but NO real concern about stripping to her undies for a porn video, then changing into other undies while the cameras roll, then having sex with a total stranger (whom she ends up respecting!) Not even any discussion if this will be just another aspect of her job next-door, or if she will ALSO get the 'acting fee.'. Also, no question about the distribution of her face, tits and ass in her community.

IF Our Heroine has worked in the pirn arena before, WHY is she blushing? If NOT why would she blush about appearing scantily clad, then not blink about fucking and sucking a stranger a few minutes later?

2*

I don't know, and apparently no one else does either, not even the author.

Why is this in "LOVING WIVES"? What do you need to do to get a degree in English these days? (apparently not much)

Commoncore graduates need to have an editor Help them!!! (if you insist that your story is written in English)

wrong category.

It takes guts to write something and put it out for the vultures to pick at.

Maybe Literotica should have a "New Authors" section.

You need a coach, which is what a good editor does. The editor would have pointed out the logical disconnects and helped the story to have a more defined shape. The story does need a lot of work, but that doesn't mean stop writing. You have a different voice that might be interesting with some more experience and help.

I don't know if this story laid or layed an egg, or if you're or your needing a little help with your English. But I don't think I've seen anything this bad in a while.

Laughably fucking stupid, from start to finish this was the literary version of a wet fart.

And this

Can you improve?

It takes guts to write something and put it out for the vultures to pick at.

Betting that anon walked into traffic while looking at nude men on his flip phone.