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All Comments on 'Fiona for Dinner'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago

The dialogues in your story totally spoil it. They are so unnatural. Real people don't talk like that. Listen to how people really speak.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
yea

yea its a good story but the dialogue is pretty artifical. they are so god damn polite and cant stop complimenting eachother... its weird...

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