All Comments on 'Firecracker'

Not worth more than that...both as a story and as writing chops go.

Was trying to venture out into a different area, obviously didn't go so well. Guess it happens when you try to force an idea and just go with the first one that pops. Oh well thanks for taking the time to read and thank you for the feedback

rehashing. nearly every thought in his head is repeated to the reader several times.

Wow, you have created a legendary Superhero, Thoughtcrime Fighter. You should be very proud!

hmm, dont know if sarcastic or not but now that I think about it like that I think a good reorking of the story might make it better. Not put as much details in the character's mind set and add more dialogue. Thoughts on this from the readers? A good base or scrap the idea?

????? WTF was that???

his URETHRA?????????????????