All Comments on 'First Day in the Caribbean 14'

Just the right mix of sex, innuendo and story line. keep it up.

Thank you for a nicely conceived and executed story. Asch Jones is almost too good -- good to a fault even -- but your characters make for an uplifting tale. You are a careful writer, without lapsing into fussiness. I appreciate the care with which you have ferreted out the typos as well as errors in grammar, punctuation, spelling, and syntax. For instance, you have the difference between the intransitive verb "lie" and the transitive verb "lay" down cold. Forgive me, therefore, for pointing to one error of fact, namely, that cashier's checks by definition cannot bounce -- unless, I suppose, they are drawn on fictitious bank.