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by BlueTang

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GymTeacherYouDeserveGymTeacherYouDeserveover 7 years ago
It was just...meh

This story seems like it was written by a man. There are some rather cartoonish notions going on here about lesbian attractions between women.

Technically, the story is good; sentences are well-written, and the content is easy to digest.

But you keep inserting that clunker (Dave)! That is a huge turn-off for me as I am a dyed in the wool lesbian.

However, I do understand how this story might be good for the bi-curious types.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Keep Dave Short....no pun!!!

Far too long. You could use the 'Dave thing' for a short paragraph or two but get on with the REAL story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

Well as a bi-curious that's never been with a woman, I found it exciting.

RastanuraRastanuraover 4 years ago
Creation

Oh Lord, you've created two sex fiends. Poor guy will never know what he missed.

moimeme68moimeme689 months ago

Amazingly written!

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When I have time to write, which isn't often enough, I draw partly on experience (much of which is with author Ethyllene), and partly on fantasy. The characters are all based on real people. I also write sometimes under RedTang. I appreciate your votes, comments and feed...