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All Comments on 'First Night'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

I found the constant switching between present and past tense really distracting.

RelaxedudeRelaxedudeover 11 years ago
Fun Read

Great story but the philosophizing in the last couple of paragraphs kind of took it out of focus.

josephstevensjosephstevensover 11 years ago
Great story!

Enjoyed it very much...nice 'plot' kept my interest and highly arousing...

DadDavisDadDavisabout 9 years ago
too wordie

It's an interestring story, but some of thre details were tooo much. Keep on writing though.

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