All Comments on 'First Time Ch. 05'

even though I am not a fan of anyone being tied up or having a ball gag in their mouth, John deserves everything he is getting for using Brenda's student Tess like he did, but I think Brenda is going a little overboard with this I mean leaving him tied up all night is a bit extreme, I would have only leave him tied up till midnight, and who's to say John will not leave Brenda after this is all done even though he was in the wrong, but this is just my opinion

I misread the part I though she pulled out the ball gag from his mouth, but it seems she pulled it out and told him if he did not shut up she would put that on him my mistake

But is was too short. It was definitely hot though.

Any chance of more chapters ? 1 Chapter when Tess is at collage and anther chapter when she finish collage and meet her mentor again would be great and maybe get together

Yeah, I was about to tell you that the coach REALLY needs to start reciprocating. I'm not a fan of bisexual stuff but having said that, I think your story is really coming into its own here.

A few suggestions: Please be more descriptive with the pussy eating. Please avoid clobber words like cunt (I know you don't use that word, but FYI)

Again--not a fan of bisexual stuff (I'm lesbian, but I DO enjoy gay lit also), but I think it would be interesting to see whether you involve the husband further or Kelly, the new girlfriend. I don't want to give specifics...I want you to make this YOUR story.

I also would like to see a longer chapter added.

Your prose is relateable--I LIKE that. It's important for us to remember that even though erotic lit is escapism...these are humans...and frankly we have our awkward moments, cringey, and moments when we are not wordsmiths when we're in the midst of a sexual encounter.

Thank you for another great addition to this series!