All Comments on 'First Time with Erin'

Please do more stories with these two!! Great start!

... there wasn't much in the way of a plot or character development, Compare with ViloletRaes12's "After Parties" by another newcomer, subject First Time, posted 7/15.

I think most guys have a girl in their life that they wish they would have been with... Val got his. Good story.

Some seem to write well of passionate sensual sex and others not.

In short, you do!

I hope we are lucky enough to see much more of your writing ability.

The story is great, especially if you are looking for a story of good quality that you don't need to get too invested in. But the cliffhanger at the end seemed hasty and like it got added last minute.

The story developed well leading to the inevitable, but unfortunately the ending seemed like an afterthought.

You built it up well, and working the ending along similar lines, 2 youngsters alone both with the hots for each other, a dip in the pool then developing further as they have so much free time together