All Comments on 'First Time with Ian Ch. 01'

by mpow

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newbyat61husker1951newbyat61husker1951almost 11 years ago
great

This was great, want to go shower with An for my first time too.

chesthairslavechesthairslavealmost 11 years ago
The British Must Have Huge Gym Individual Shower Stalls to Accomodate So Much Sex!

It's very difficult to comment on a true story. Mark had a successful first time gay sexual experience. And is looking forward to another 'gym session'. Ian was obviously taking the lead in actions and instructions. Was there no fear of being caught? For an initial story, our author, 'mpow' wrote well. There are some minor issues with grammar which need to be corrected. As the readers have been teased with 'Ch. 01', I believe that Ian and Mark as characters should be fleshed out more for following chapters. Additional dialogue between them or private thoughts would help. Keep writing. Look forward to your next submission.

Jasonh007Jasonh007almost 11 years ago
Loved it!

I really enjoyed the story. This is short of a fantasy of mine and it turned me on to read it as imagined by you!

ChiRolandChiRolandalmost 11 years ago

I hope it is a true story. It is the ultimate gay sex fantasy, the public shower. A very hot story!

liz33ndliz33ndover 8 years ago

Very nice story. Had a guy chk me out in a beach public changing room. Such a trun on.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Exciting and Enjoyable

I love it. I Love It. I LOVE IT. I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT.

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