All Comments on 'Fishing with Dad'

I enjoyed the fun read. I was a nice loving story that can go farther if you want it to.

Thanks for writing!

Sexmate!

That was terrific!

I can't think of a better way to start a day, and to begin a relationship!! That was a great story! It could go further, and I would like to read more about it. But it has to stay in the same loving mood as this first story!

I liked the way you told this story, Sean. Plenty of love to go with the lust. Hope to read more in the future. Good luck to you. ~Minx

I don't go with fishing, but their other activity had me all hot!

Lukas

Arousing story...would like to read more installments (the author has set up the situation & characters so well, it's a shame to stop now). Great job...now let your characters explore each other further.

it was good once it got going. too much pre activity.

I like the idea, and your characterizations, but the story could be much better with a little careful editing to fix some typos, grammatical errors, etc. There are lots of volunteer editors on Lit, so ask a few and find one who's willing to work with you. You'll find that your work will become much better as a result.

Keep writing

I'm looking forward to reading Chapter 2. This is natural sex at its best, and I'm hoping she wants to have his baby as they enjoy each other au natural in nature.

Loved the way you had both of them wanting each other. Such good descriptions...maybe a bit more explicit, but it just a great story

great story very erotic love the finnish cant wait for more of the same

you did a wonderful job!!!

We need more of this one. Perhaps "Daddy" can make it so that he becomes a Daddy and Grandaddy, together? Very erotic yet very natural.

The only bad thing about this story is that there isn't more of it. You could have continued the sexual interlude without having to write any more story.

"She kicked off her shoes and swam back over to the boat gripping the edge."

Yet, half a dozen paragraphs later: "Beneath the water she started untying her boots and kicking them off..."

Don't know about anyone else, but I find wearing a pair of shoes inside a pair of boots decidedly uncomfortable!

Just an observation but did you realise that when they went into the water at the lake Lila first kicked off her shoes before swimming back to the boat, and then ducked under the water to untied her boots before they swam for the shore.

a one foot 20lb bass, must be made of lead

The only tall tail was about the fish! Hehehe ;)

That was a fun chapter! Very down to earth too. Thanks! :)