All Comments on 'Fist and Kiss Ch. 01'

Was this s story or a Christmas list of fantasies that will never happen? Learn how to write a story moron. This was stupid!

Is it possible to give this a minus rating, this has got to be the biggest pile of crap I have ever had the misfortune to stumble across, please,please DO NOT WRITE ANY MORE.

Or do a much better job of proof reading. Did you even bother to re-read this mess?

I have my fans and I will continue to write for them.

I don't want to bash creativity so try this. When you are done writing, read it aloud to yourself or someone else to get a sense of how it sounds and flows. This could be an amazing story but it is like listening to Steve Carell's character from Anchor man, "I love desk, I love chair, I love rug, etc...

Try writing a piece with a few less characters, simple activities, maybe only one thing and see if you can make that story flow, erotically or otherwise. Once you have the basics down, start expanding. Although someone edited, using the term loosely, this; get a few other sets of eyes on these first and ask for honest feedback, it will make you better,