by Goeffery42
I liked the story, but it was ruined by the lack of editing. Before submitting, please read your story. Run both a spell checker and a grammar checker. You tell a very nice story and the reader shouldn't be distracted by mispellings or the wrong use of a word.
Loved the story line... looking forward to your continuation.
My only question is, "Waiter or waitress?" How will Val be punished? How will the shop owner pay his workers? I guess I have a few questions. Keep the stories coming.
would love to read about the party, and maybe fun after it
Please come back and finish this story!!
I believe that there is so much more to say and I can't wait to read it.
Made me hard as a rock. I wished it would have been me.
I would like to read about the party they went to.
you sound like a 15 year old kid. i couldnt take it serious
I loved it, good rythem to the story, it moved a little fast when they got caught, but still enjoyable
I loved the story. Maybe in tour next installment at the party you'll suck Mr. Stevens while Valerie fucks you and Beth sucks your cock.
Being a crossdresser, its amazing how many shop assistance know that we are crossdressers. My first experiance with a shop assistance was over twenty years ago. I still see her every now and then. She taught me so much how to dress as a woman and ware makeup. Over the years she’s had me entertain a lot of her male & other cd & female friends.