All Comments on 'Five Bright Smiles'

I see that I have several typos in the descriptive phrase. It should have read, A beauty pageant to select Miss Tru-Bolt. I always ask myself, how did I let that happen? I have no answer. My apologies.

Minor grammer didn't even notice. As usual I love ur writing. I just want to make sure I understand there's padgets like this all the time specifacly for money ran by the company and the purpose is to find the perfact girl to in so many words prostitute for the company or am I missing something anyway I love the concept and I think wendy should win lol keep up the writing ur awesome

Love the concept and writing style. It does seem to drag on a bit. The flashback to the auction was more distracting than interesting, the backstage with Paul jr seemed long. I found myself thinking move it along, what about the tru bolt pagent? I think it would read better tightened up to the main purpose of the story. Just an opinion-it feels a 3 and the idea could be a 5.

Thanks for that critique. I believe I do tend to drag stories out. I'll keep your ideas in mind as I write more. Please keep commenting. Your thoughts are quite valuable!