All Comments on 'Flashpoint'

Nicely done. Well written and hot.

This is excellent! Such beautiful language as you guided me through this erotic world. You know what turns a man on.

Great character development and interactions. I'm wondering what the two women might have done if Jim had gone home without satisfying their needs?

Your "stud finder" <i>double entendre</i> is cute.

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<i>Jim took a second to look at the hardware, which was a bracket rail system. Metal slots would hold brackets, which in turn would hold the shelves up. "Looks like it will. Do you have a stud finder?"

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My eyes ran the full length of Jim's body and my mouth went dry. "Yeah, I'm pretty sure I do."</i>

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Nice foreshadowing (and symbolism, perhaps?) in the form of the mention of the open window that wasn't open before.

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Jim’s reluctance adds needed tension to the story.

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The following passage is really hot. Whoa! A pussy opening itself up for plunder?! Can we see replays of the video of that? Please?

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<i>The sound of Emily's moans and slurping sounds on Jim's dick sent shivers of delight down my spine, shaking droplets of wetness from my body. I spread my legs a little to allow the cool air the ability to tickle across my pussy as it opened itself up for plunder. </i>

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Having fingers in two juicy pies, as Jim does, is a male fantasy.

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The following passage is rather poetic.

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<i>As Emily started the journey toward the edge of the universe and toppled over its edge, I felt my body heat with liquid fire. Tremors ran through my limbs then raced back to my core, tightening. </i>

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Thanks for a hot, well-written story.

"Feminity" in my comment should have been "Femininity". So sorry.

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In case you are wondering, I should mention that steamy Femininity lies in a valley between the two long Gams and south of the Grand Tetons.

The story and content was very good, I just wish you would have described both women as well as you did the man. Would have been nice to see the two women getting it on also

i liked this 3some

Dirtykitten, your written descriptions were both visual and and sensual poetry. Bravo,Bravo

Well written and very erotic.