by BreakTheBar
Epic first chapter, the fertility concept is good, build himself a harem, the dialogue was entertaining and sexy as fuck. Please don't start racking up tonnes of harem members though with quick suck and fuck scenes, give them depth, personality and makes the scenes and good as the ones in this chapter and that'll put you on the path to a great story. I know you haven't delved into enemies yet, but if you're going for an actual story not just a stroke fest then give us some real dark characters for enemies, add in some heartache, loss and betrayal and you'll do fine.
You're first chapter has me hooked and I hope to read a second chapter soon.
Great story so far! Nice characterization, not too over the top, great sex, and the introduction of enticing future paramours.
You have set the bait and hooked me in, now for additional chapters that are of the same quality as this one. Will be waiting with a need for relief of my sexual energy. Thank you.
As the editor, I'm pumped to see this hit the site! Looking forward to more.
Perfect story, so curious how it will continue. And very well written!
Excellent story. I really enjoyed this, so I hope you have plans to continue it.
Thank you all for the wonderful comments. FoF Chapter 2 was finished, but is currently undergoing some restructuring to provide a better story for all. Depending on 'real life' schedules I'm hoping to be able to post by the end of the week. In the mean time I have submitted a one-off Incest story which should be up much sooner if anyone is interested.
Also, another big THANKS to Ante_Matter for his editing and his pushing me to never cut corners. Hopefully you will all appreciate Chapter 2 much more because of his insights.
.....then there's no such thing!
I'm looking forward to more of the sexy fun that characterizes this story.
Thank you!
That was the most fun I've had reading sexy story in... Well, probably since adolescence 40 years ago. Hot, new and funny are a good combo, and the tone and writing were spot on. Thanks!
Very enjoyable first segment of this story. Thank you for sharing it with us.
One of the better stories I've had the pleasure (pun intended) of reading here. I LOVE the premise, and your execution leaves nothing to be desired. Great start and I'm really looking forward to more.
I love harem genre this is the first new one I've seen in a while. Is very well written and a great storyline keep up the good work. You definitely gained a new fan of your writings.
I loved Font of Fertility Ch 1.
It was well written, seriously funny in places (Is Adama going to appear at the most inappropriate moments every time?), and the sex was hot!
Really looking forward to Chapter 2 with Lauren and her sister in a threesome, but with Jeremiah checking out his sister's ass, is Stacey also going to be part of his 'Harem'?
Now have this story and yourself both added as favourites!
Can't wait for more!!
The first part of the story was so hot. God it made me want it. The part where Adana showed up was weird. Not really a big fan of her.
The title held me off from reading your story, but when I noticed you had another one written in a different category, I checked it out, and danm your a good writer.
So glad I did, cause this story is worth the price of admission. You don't seem to need advice or direction, so here's some praise: ./cheer ./applause
Dude tht was great totally looking forward to frequent releases of this. Off to chapter 2!!!!!
Nope.
Font definition just typing it into Google:
1.
a receptacle in a church for the water used in baptism, typically a freestanding stone structure.
another term for stoup.
a reservoir for oil in an oil lamp.
2.
a fount.
"they dip down into the font of wisdom"
Really...just check yourself before tapping someone on the shoulder. Sheesh.
Haven't read 2 or 3 yet, wanted to leave some feedback before I do.
I love this, great foundation and I really, really like that it's more than just a sex fantasy. Keep up the good work!
NICE WORK OF ART. KEEP IT UP. I'VE READ HUNDREDS OF STORIES. THIS IS A WORK OF A MASTER. THANKS.
Good start!! Hogwarts sex school!! I laughed so hard, in a good way!! Keep it up;)
This was a fantastic start. Amazing writing with great dialogue. A very interesting story so far and I can see tons of room for growth to this story.
On the the next chapter!
Thanks for posting!
Awesome start to a magic story! Believable and with a charming boy we can cheer for.
asianToy
I look forward to seeing where you take us
great start laughed my ass of at the hogwarts pun hope you keep up the great story plot and character development
is one of my favorite stories on this site. One I enjoy reading over again.
lots of 3's in sets of 3's to the power of 3, but my favourite line:
"Mentor of Magic and Fifth Seat on the Council of Threes"
This so much fun I am going to have to read this series a third time
Guys, I hate to disappoint you, but don't read this story. Yes, the story is good, quite good, but the story hasn't been updated recently. It's been stuck at seven chapters for a year now.
The author's bio (updated 11/16) says he will be continuing the series. Be patient.
I know there is a lot of eroticism here, but its fun too. I wasn't wanting something real heavy, and I wasn't wanting most of the stuff in the 'Humor" category either. That stuffs just stupid. But this is very sexual, with overtones of love between them, concern for Lauren's sister who acts too much the slut, I think he honestly loves and cares for Stacy, and then theres this Magical Nubian Queen (Latifa) who comes to see them. She tells him he has a magical Pekker, can do just about anything he wants but to keep a low profile, and needs lots of Pussy - and will have his whole life his Prime. That's not something every Teenager knows about their future. Gotta read more.
The theme of this is similar to what I was writing on this site. So obviously I liked it.
Shame it ended, much as my own did.
Beware, only one half a story (quits after chapter 7)
Well bear, better a quitter than a non-starter, l like yourself for example!!
Fun over the top story.
Enjoyed all 7 chapters
Thanks for the story.
I too would love to hear more.
I love this story! This is my second read through and it’s still as good as I remember.
I've never read your stuff before, and only found this one in the similar column after reading a Lexx Ruthless story. I got to say I'm not really into the sci-fi erotica usually but this start is interesting enough and might delve into incest which is an interest in erotica of mine. I like the demi-god Adama or whatever she is. It's a good character.
That’s for sure. It’s going to be quite interesting to see how this story turns out.
I am officially hooked. Now on to part 2.
I can't wait to see what happens next, but I have a suspicion that Mom and Sis will end up joining the harem before long. I'm also curious to see if Adama will eventually become more than just a voyeur and join the festivities.
Loving it, second time around.
One thing I think I missed the first time around that doesn't make sense, Lauren didn't want him to come inside her because it wasn't safe, but then he pulled out and took the condom off! What teenage girl losing her virginity doesn't think that it's safe for the guy to cum inside her if he's wearing a condom?
Awesome story line and character development... but the story has no conclusion. The author says that it will take a while, but he will be posting 6-7 chapters soon. That was 5 years ago!!!
Don’t get hooked on this story...not an easy task after reading chapter 1...the story line builds and develops...it’s a great read. But the author doesn’t finish the story. So sad...
I'm enjoying this story. Watching someone figure out their own mystery generates lots of emotions for readers (imho). Dipping the mystery into sex a couple dozen times makes for some interesting chapters. Hope you take advantage of the opportunities.
"Alright," I agreed with some trepidation, not really sure I wanted to force her into anything. What if I hurt her or she started choking? Well, I guess that was the point, wasn't it?“ how are you forcing her ifshe is literally asking you to push her head? Fml.
“Lauren drove me home in her parent's car, both of us quietly sitting,“ what kind of dude is this? She drives them to the movies, now to his house..? Why doesnt he have his own car or something?
“I owed her more than I could give, I thought. “ why or what does he owe her? Wtf lol.. you dont “owe” people to be in a relationship with you.
Plus whatsup with his 0 confidence.. here she is fully into him and loving it yet hes having thoughts like i offer her nothing but a lumpy body and magic dick.. btw didnt he hear what that women said? Its not only his dick but everything about him magic.
“I reached over and grabbed Lauren's hand and she glanced at me and smiled.” Its like hes the women and shes the man, their roles are totally reversed. The same during and after sex, she decided which girls HE should fuck instead of him deciding it himself.
“she reached over and pulled me into a kiss, strong but short, before murmuring, "I gotta go." Again she is leading the interaction.
“She laughed and grabbed my chin, pulling me into another kiss.“ aaand again she pulls him.
Weezyf needs to chill haha, getting yourself all wound up over a fictional story.
The funny thing about Weezyf's comment is that what he's describing is a combination of character flaws and some female domination in the relationship, both of which are indicative of good writing. It makes sense that Jeremiah would be way less confident about this than Lauren, he'd never really realized this relationship would be a thing until recently while she'd been waiting for him to ask her out for a couple years. The considerate and self-deprecating way he thinks just serves to create a more convincing character. Weezyf seems to have a certain traditional relationship model in mind and has expectations about how much of a "man" a porn protagonist should be, which is kinda bullshit.
Anyway, yeah, as I said, great writing and great world-building. This has a level of quality that's rare in online erotica. I would love to see the series continue. If I could change one thing: "taught" is the past tense of "teach." When describing fabric that's been pulled tight or something like that, it's spelled "taut." I know this is a small detail, and I can read past it, but EVERYONE makes this mistake, so fixing it would set you apart even more.
At least this thing has the self-awareness to mock itself as "some kind of pornographic Harry Potter", which made the sheer gratuitousness somewhat bearable. I was kind of disappointed with how a modern girl (from our generally monogamous modern world) straight-up embraced the idea of 1-to-many polygamy. I mean, you could technically justify all unusual behavior with "because magic dick" but it would have been so much better to see her struggle with the concept for a while, maybe have Jerry struggle due to a lack of magical power, have her look into why polygamy was a thing in the past, have her contemplate/experience breaking up with Jeremy because she's spent years being conditioned by the modern way of thinking, etc.
There's a difference between being physiologically turned on, and being in an emotionally satisfying relationship and it seems like this series is going to throw away the opportunity to explore that disconnect and just have all the girls be obedient nympho sex dolls.
Now reading this for the second time - simply because I really enjoyed it the first time!
An excellent, lighthearted, bit of sexy fun. Very readable - occasionally good enough to laugh about and often utterly absorbing.
My kind of fun; my preferred reading pre-bed and no stressing me over complicated arrangements or overly absurd scenarios.
An easy-read type of porn story to which I give 5 stars willingly.
Just a Quick FYI for anyone coming and checking back - FoF is receiving new updates! Chapters are going live on Literotica, but you'll find more up on my Patreon (www.patreon.com/breakthebar)
I’m going around for the second time to familiarize myself before getting into the new chapters. Very glad you started up again!
this is far better than i initially thought it was going to be. Its a really strange concept but also a really intriguing concept. Definitely looking forward to reading more of this
I thought this story was gonna be dumb as hell. It's not. It's hilarious and well written. You've got a talent for dialogue writing.
A little off centered, BUT I think I’m beginning to catch on. Starting with this gig, moving on to the next. I love retirement. Gives me time to catch my freak and chill out. Great job, but let’s go fir the bubble but some sis.
I put off reading this story, not being sure about it.
But so far so good, scores 5/5. Let’s see where this leads.
This was a quirky and funny story. I enjoyed the priorities that the main character set: #1 a big cock. #2 not needing to worry about getting a girl pregnant by controlling his sperm count. #3 giving himself a sexy desirable body so the girls can be more easily turned on. #4. He hadn't thought that far, haha. I'm betting that he chooses unlimited stamina that he can control or unlimited quick recovery so he can keep going.
I read this series a short while back and enjoyed it. I noticed a few chapters added but decided to reread the previous chpters to remember some of the charactets and stuff i had forgotten before i read the new chaptets. Looking forward reading everything.
Thanks BtB for the honest description of everyone’s first time on page one. No one is a natural at sex, propaganda notwithstanding. We learn through good will and our mistakes. 5*
This is just a warning to readers. If you're here because of the incest kink, the author retcons those relationships later in the story to be just step stuff. So if that's why you're here, move along, spare yourself the disappointment.
When all you want to do is fuck your hot girlfriend with your new magic dick but the universe decides you gotta be part of some magic council and sort out magical issues and shit. Life can be so unfair sometimes. :'(
Its amazing that a guy can have a literal 'magic dick' and still come across as a total SIMP! 😂😂😂
?Was musing he, and certainly Lauren, SO lucky her didn't wish for an extra 4" -condom would have burst...
WAY torn up her pussy, and HOW could they have explained that at the ER? She doesn't have a magic pussy...
And what would their parents have thought if they'd heard Lauren pimping out her own sister?
And the size queens he'll meet that don't want him sharing his magical baby batter with any others?
And just to be clear he now has a magical dick AND bollocks...
yanno, i read this a *while* ago. gave it a like and all that...
but it stuck in my mind, and i wanted to read it again, add it to my favorites. it's taken me *two weeks* to dig it back out of the masses.
worth every moment.
Read this when it first appeared. Loved it then even though only a few chapters and still enjoying it now.
Great to see it continued and i now need to catch up.... :)
Many thanks for sharing with us all.
After enjoying QT:NW so much I had to take a look into your other works and as I figured, you didn’t just accidentally make QT:NW such an incredible story, you apparently are that damn good. I just started this series but it promises to be another great series that I can’t wait to get deeper into. If all your work is this good then I now have something to keep me busy for at least a week or two and that doesn’t even count considering I have to take a gander at your Patreon page and see what that’s gonna cost me although in complete honesty, I spend so much on there already what’s another few bucks. Thanks and keep up the great work.