All Comments on 'Fool'

Very believable. You are a talented author

and the next day life settles in and lets cupid do his tasks. TK U MLJ LV NV

Nice story, definitely 5 stars.

You could probably add another chapter? Anyways sad that it got over .

Developed very well and I could feel Kevin's pain after the "prank" happened. Hope to see more stories from you.

I enjoyed it

I know you are from India and I assume that English is not your primary language. To make this story work better, several things need to be done.

Try to use one tense for the entire story. In one paragraph you used both present and past tense.

Spelling is another issue. This needs to be worked on.

In order to make the best story I strongly recommend you use an editor. Good luck.